旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答直接，理由和例子都比较具体，整体逻辑清晰。主要问题是词语搭配不自然： “beautiful scene view”应改为“beautiful scenery”或“beautiful views”；“makes the travel”更自然的表达是“makes the journey/trip”。此外，可以使用“Also”或“Besides”连接第二个好处，使答案更加连贯。

範例: Yes, I definitely prefer sitting by the window when I travel because I can enjoy beautiful views and watch the changing landscape. For example, on train journeys, I love watching the countryside and small towns pass by. It makes the journey much more enjoyable and relaxing.

建議: 答案包含了旅行时长、活动和感受，内容比较丰富，但开头表达错误，应将“Where was a child?”改为“When I was a child”。注意时态一致：过去经历应使用“there were”，而不是“there are”；“different culture”应改为“cultural differences”或“different cultures”。最后一句不要以“And”开头，可以用“Moreover”或直接连接前一句。建议减少“uh”等犹豫词，并先明确回答“是的，这是一次较长的旅行”。

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I travelled to Singapore with my family, and the journey took about five or six hours. Although it was quite long, I really enjoyed the trip because we visited several attractions and tried different kinds of food. I was also fascinated by the cultural differences between Singapore and China.

× Yeah, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I can see lots of beautiful scene view and enjoy the changing landscape.

✓ Yeah, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I can see lots of beautiful scenes and enjoy the changing landscape.

“Lots of”后面通常要接可数名词复数，因此“scene”应改为“scenes”。另外，“scene view”不是自然的英语表达，直接使用“scenes”更准确。建议记住：lots of + 可数名词复数或不可数名词。

× For example, on train journeys I like watching the countryside in small towns pass by, which makes the travel much more interesting.

✓ For example, on train journeys I like watching the countryside in small towns pass by, which makes travel much more interesting.

这里的“travel”表示一般意义上的旅行，是不可数名词，通常不需要使用定冠词“the”。因此应说“makes travel much more interesting”。如果指某一次具体旅程，也可以说“makes the journey much more interesting”。

× Where was a child?

✓ When I was a child, I went to Singapore with my family.

“Where was a child?”句子结构不完整，而且“Where”表示地点，不符合语境。这里想表达“当我还是个孩子时”，应该使用时间连接词“When”，并补充主语“I”和系动词“was”。建议区分：when表示“什么时候”，where表示“在哪里”。

× And there are many, uh, different culture between Singapore and China.

✓ And there are many cultural differences between Singapore and China.

“Many”后面需要接可数名词复数，不能使用单数“culture”。这里表达的是两地之间的文化差异，因此使用复数名词“differences”更自然。建议记住：many + 可数名词复数，例如“many differences”。