旅行— Part 1 評分報告
對話
Part 1
考官
Do you prefer to sit by the window when travelling?
考生
I love to sit by the window while traveling. To begin with, I could watch resplendent sceneries. However, some people don't prefer to sit by the window while travelling. It's because watching sceneries impairs their sickness.
考官
Did you have a long journey with your family as a child?
考生
When I was a child, my family and I went to Thailand. Thailand is one of the biggest countries in Asia. That's why we went to Thailand. In Thailand, our family wrote an elephant and tried exhaustic foods. That experience was the best experience I've ever had.
評估
總分
Part 1
Do you prefer to sit by the window when travelling?
分數: 65.0建議: 주제 문장으로 선호를 명확히 제시한 점은 좋습니다. 하지만 ‘resplendent sceneries’는 다소 부자연스럽고, scenery는 일반적으로 셀 수 없는 명사이므로 ‘beautiful scenery’ 또는 ‘the view’를 사용하는 것이 적절합니다. 또한 ‘watching sceneries impairs their sickness’는 의미와 표현이 어색하므로 ‘some people get motion sickness when they sit by the window’처럼 말해야 합니다. 자신의 이유를 먼저 구체적으로 설명하고, 다른 사람들의 의견은 불필요하다면 생략하여 더 효과적으로 답변하세요.
範例: Yes, I definitely prefer sitting by the window when I travel. I enjoy looking at the scenery, especially when I’m travelling through the countryside or along the coast. It also makes the journey feel more relaxing and interesting. However, people who get motion sickness may prefer an aisle seat.
Did you have a long journey with your family as a child?
分數: 55.0建議: 질문에 직접 답하고 여행 경험을 제시한 점은 좋지만, ‘Thailand is one of the biggest countries in Asia. That’s why we went to Thailand.’는 사실과 인과관계가 부자연스럽고 질문과도 관련성이 낮습니다. ‘rode an elephant’와 ‘exotic food’가 올바른 표현이며, ‘exhaustic’은 잘못된 단어입니다. 또한 ‘the best experience I’ve ever had’는 어린 시절의 과거 경험과 연결할 때 다소 과장되거나 어색할 수 있으므로 ‘one of the most memorable experiences of my childhood’처럼 표현하는 것이 자연스럽습니다. 여행 기간이나 이동 방법, 가장 인상 깊었던 활동을 구체적으로 덧붙이고, ‘because’, ‘while’, ‘as a result’ 같은 연결어를 사용하세요.
範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my family and I took a long trip to Thailand, which took many hours by plane. We visited several tourist attractions, rode elephants, and tried some exotic local dishes. Although the journey was tiring, it was one of the most memorable experiences of my childhood.
文法
× I could watch resplendent sceneries.
✓ I could watch resplendent scenery.
Scenery is an uncountable noun, so it is not normally used in the plural form sceneries when referring to views in general. Use scenery instead. You can also say beautiful views if you want to refer to individual sights.
× It's because watching sceneries impairs their sickness.
✓ It's because watching scenery impairs their sickness.
Scenery is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized in this context. Use scenery rather than sceneries. However, this sentence is also unnatural in meaning; a more natural expression would be Watching the scenery makes them feel sick.
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