旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear, relevant, and grammatically accurate. However, “Obviously” sounds slightly too emphatic, and “love the idea of sitting” is less natural than “love sitting.” Add one specific supporting detail, such as how the view makes you feel or what you usually do during the journey. Use a linking word such as “because” to connect your preference with the reason.

範例: Yes, I definitely prefer sitting by the window because I enjoy watching the scenery go by. It also makes long journeys feel more relaxing and gives me something interesting to look at.

建議: You answered the question directly and included a personal example, but several phrases need correction. Say “When I was seven” instead of “when I was 7,” “went on vacation” instead of “went to ... for vacation,” “It is still a vivid memory” instead of “those are really ripped memory,” and “it strengthened our family bonds” instead of “it strengthened our stream family bonds.” Avoid the filler “uh,” and use a linking word such as “because” or “as a result” to make the answer more coherent.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was seven, my family went on vacation to Nanjing, and it was quite a long journey. I still remember it vividly because we played games and talked together during the trip, which strengthened our family bonds.

× I always remember those are really ripped memory and it strengthened our stream family bonds.

✓ I always remember that trip as a really vivid memory, and it strengthened our family bond.

Those is a plural demonstrative pronoun, but memory is singular. The sentence should use a singular expression consistently, such as that trip and a really vivid memory. Practice matching singular and plural nouns with suitable determiners and pronouns.

× I always remember those are really ripped memory and it strengthened our stream family bonds.

✓ I always remember that trip as a really vivid memory, and it strengthened our family bond.

The journey happened in the past, so are should not be used to describe the event. The revised sentence uses a past-time expression and strengthened for the past result. When telling a past story, check that the verbs describing completed events use the past tense.

× I always remember those are really ripped memory and it strengthened our stream family bonds.

✓ I always remember that trip as a really vivid memory, and it strengthened our family bond.

Those does not clearly refer to the singular event being discussed, and the original sentence has an unclear reference between those and it. That trip clearly identifies the journey, while it clearly refers back to the trip. Use pronouns only when their antecedents are clear and agree in number.

× I always remember those are really ripped memory and it strengthened our stream family bonds.

✓ I always remember that trip as a really vivid memory, and it strengthened our family bond.

Ripped and stream are not suitable adjectives in this context. Vivid describes a strong and clear memory, while strong describes family bonds. Learn common adjective-noun combinations, such as a vivid memory and strong family bonds.

× I always remember those are really ripped memory and it strengthened our stream family bonds.

✓ I always remember that trip as a really vivid memory, and it strengthened our family bond.

The singular countable noun memory needs a determiner. The phrase a really vivid memory correctly uses the indefinite article a. Remember to use a or an with singular countable nouns when referring to one nonspecific example.