旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and enthusiastic, but has several grammatical errors, some redundancy and a few unclear phrases (e.g., “when I sick to the window”). To improve: 1) Start with a concise topic sentence that directly answers the question. 2) Use correct tense and subject-verb agreement (e.g., prefer/preferred). 3) Avoid redundancy by choosing one or two supporting details. 4) Use linking words for coherence (for example, “because,” “so,” or “for example”). 5) Fix vocabulary/phrasing errors (e.g., “sit by the window,” “I get excited”).

範例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy seeing the scenery. For example, when I visit a new place I get excited and like to take photos, so sitting by the window helps me capture better views.

建議: Good direct answer and relevant memories, but improve grammar, word choice and coherence. Specific improvements: 1) Use correct past tense forms and articles (e.g., “travelled to different cities”). 2) Combine short sentences with linking words (e.g., “so,” “and,” “because”) to make your response coherent. 3) Add a specific example or brief detail to make the answer more vivid (one detail is enough). 4) Keep total length under five sentences and avoid repeating family members.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child my parents often took my sister and me on long trips to different cities during school holidays, so I have many happy memories. For example, I remember visiting the coast once and spending the whole day on the beach with them.

× Yes, absolutely and I think everyone preferred to sit by window because when we travel we can see the beautiful scenery especially when I go to the new place that I have never been, I really excited and I always take photos when I sick to the window.

✓ Yes, absolutely, and I think everyone prefers to sit by the window because when we travel we can see the beautiful scenery, especially when I go to a new place that I have never been; I am really excited and I always take photos when I sit by the window.

Multiple errors: 1) Article use: 'sit by window' needs the definite article 'the window' (Grammar problem type ID 17). 2) Verb tense/subject-verb agreement: 'everyone preferred' should be present 'everyone prefers' to match habitual action (IDs 6 and 27). 3) Article/quantity: 'the new place' better as 'a new place' when speaking generally (ID 22). 4) Missing verb form and state: 'I really excited' requires 'I am really excited' (sentence structure/verb be issue, IDs 3 and 26). 5) Word choice and spelling: 'when I sick to the window' incorrect; correct is 'when I sit by the window' (preposition and verb form, IDs 11 and 8). Suggestions: use correct articles ('the' for specific window, 'a' for nonspecific place), ensure subject-verb agreement for habits, include the verb 'be' for states, and use 'sit by the window' for the idiomatic phrase. Note: Only changes relevant to the listed grammar problem types were applied.

× Yes, absolutely. When I was a child, my father always told me and my sister to travel different city when we were on school holidays.

✓ Yes, absolutely. When I was a child, my father always told my sister and me to travel to different cities when we were on school holidays.

Errors addressed: 1) Incorrect word order in the object: 'told me and my sister' is acceptable but 'told my sister and me' is more natural and avoids pronoun case error (ID 12). 2) Missing preposition and plural: 'travel different city' needs 'travel to different cities' to show movement and plural form for multiple cities (IDs 11 and 1). Suggestions: use 'travel to' for movement and pluralize 'city' when referring to multiple places; use the objective pronoun order 'my sister and me'.

× So I remember many journeys with my mum and my dad.

✓ So I remember many journeys with my mum and dad.

This sentence had redundancy in 'my mum and my dad.' While not strictly ungrammatical, streamlining to 'my mum and dad' is more natural (Grammar problem type ID 26). Suggestion: omit repeated possessive pronouns when referring to multiple people to improve fluency.