旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer addresses the question and gives reasons, but it is long, slightly repetitive and contains small grammatical errors. To improve, make a clear topic sentence, use linking words to connect reasons, avoid repetition, and correct prepositions/articles (e.g., “sit by the window” not “at the window” is acceptable but be consistent). Keep to 2–4 concise sentences and include one specific example or detail.

範例: I prefer to sit by the window when I travel. Firstly, I enjoy looking at the scenery and landscapes as the plane moves, which I find relaxing. Also, a window seat feels more private and lets me lean against the wall to sleep comfortably.

建議: Good content and clear meaning, but the phrasing can be more natural and specific. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add a specific detail about the journey (how long, what you did, a memorable moment). Use linking words such as “because” or “for example” to connect ideas and vary vocabulary (e.g., “road trip,” “relatives,” “across the country”).

範例: Yes, we often took long road trips across the country when I was a child. For example, one trip lasted about ten hours as we drove to visit my grandparents, and I remember stopping at small towns and playing games in the car to pass the time.

× Yes, I prefer to sit at the window rather than I or sit because I love to see scenery and landscape while I am on the plane and I feel more comfortable and private with the window seat and I can lean against the window when I need to sleep.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window rather than in the aisle because I love to see the scenery and landscapes while I am on the plane, and I feel more comfortable and private in the window seat, and I can lean against the window when I need to sleep.

Multiple preposition and word choice errors: 'at the window' is less natural than 'by the window' for seating; 'rather than I or sit' is incorrect and likely intended as 'rather than in the aisle' (preposition 'in' + noun phrase); 'see scenery and landscape' needs articles and pluralization: 'the scenery and landscapes' or simply 'the scenery'; 'with the window seat' is better as 'in the window seat' to indicate location. Suggestion: choose correct prepositions for location ('by', 'in'), fix the comparison phrase ('rather than in the aisle'), use articles ('the') and plural where appropriate, and separate clauses with commas to improve clarity.

× Here we used to have a long road trip across the country.

✓ Yes, we used to take long road trips across the country.

The original sentence has unnatural word order and an incorrect use of 'have' with 'a long road trip' when describing habitual past actions. Use 'used to' + base verb to describe past habitual actions: 'used to take' or 'used to go on'. Also pluralize 'road trips' if implying repeated journeys. Suggestion: say 'we used to take long road trips' for clarity and naturalness.

× That trip was our journey to meet our relatives that lived in another part of the country.

✓ That trip was our journey to visit relatives who lived in another part of the country.

Use of 'to meet our relatives' is acceptable but 'to visit relatives' is more natural when referring to travel. Relative clause: use 'who' for people rather than 'that'. Also 'our relatives who lived' is more concise than repeating 'our'. Suggestion: replace 'that' with 'who' and use 'visit' for clarity.