旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Mejora la claridad y fluidez eliminando repeticiones y organizando la respuesta: empieza con una oración directa que responda a la pregunta, luego añade una o dos frases de apoyo con detalles específicos y usa conectores simples (for example → for instance / such as). Evita repetir frases como “for example” y reduce las muletillas. Mantén máximo 3–4 oraciones.

範例: Yes, I prefer sitting by the window when I travel. I enjoy looking at the passing landscape, such as fields, rivers and towns, because it helps me relax. For instance, on train journeys I like watching changing scenery which makes the trip more interesting.

建議: Organiza la respuesta con una oración directa y detalles específicos: comienza diciendo claramente no, luego explica brevemente por qué y añade un simple deseo o recuerdo con ejemplo concreto. Corrige la gramática (por ejemplo, “move to another city” → “move to another city” o “relocate nearby”) y evita frases redundantes como “I would like to have one” repetidas. Usa 2–3 oraciones coherentes.

範例: No, I didn’t have a long family trip as a child. We usually moved to nearby towns rather than travelling far, so I don’t have memories of long journeys. I would like to experience a long family holiday in the future, for example a week-long road trip to the coast.

× Yes, I find it really comfortable to be near the window because I can see for example the view of the landscape for for example when I'm in the train or in the car, so I really enjoy that.

✓ Yes, I find it really comfortable to be near the window because I can see, for example, the landscape when I'm on the train or in the car, so I really enjoy that.

The sentence has redundant phrases ('for example' repeated) and incorrect preposition use ('in the train' should be 'on the train'). Also 'the view of the landscape' is wordy; 'the landscape' is natural. Use of present participle is not needed here; the main issue is preposition and redundancy. Suggestion: remove duplicate words, place 'for example' before the example clause, and use correct prepositions for transport ('on' for trains).

× No, I don't remember any journey with my family long.

✓ No, I don't remember any long journeys with my family.

This sentence has wrong word order and plurality. 'Any journey ... long' is awkward; the adjective 'long' should precede the noun and 'journey' should be plural after 'any' when speaking generally. Keep present tense 'don't remember' since the memory persists. Suggestion: use 'any long journeys'.

× We usually move to a city another but not too far.

✓ We usually moved to another city, but not too far.

The original has incorrect word order and wrong tense for a childhood context. 'Move to a city another' is ungrammatical; correct order is 'move(d) to another city'. Because the question asks about childhood journeys, past tense is appropriate: 'moved'. Also add a comma before 'but'. Suggestion: place 'another' before the noun and use past tense for actions in the past.

× I would like to have one.

✓ I would like to have one.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It uses the modal 'would' plus base verb 'like' to express a desire; no change is needed. Note: keep the conditional form to express a hypothetical wish.

× It would be actually really enjoyable having one, but I don't remember having when I was a child.

✓ It would actually be really enjoyable to have one, but I don't remember having one when I was a child.

Problems: misplaced adverb 'actually' and incorrect verb pattern 'enjoyable having one' — use 'enjoyable to have' or 'would be enjoyable to have'. Also the second clause lacks the object ('one') after 'having' and has awkward word order. Use 'having one when I was a child' to clarify. Suggestion: reorder words, include the object, and use 'to have' after 'enjoyable'.