旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Structure your answer more clearly: start with a direct topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific reasons and a brief example. Reduce repetition and avoid filler words. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas and choose correct words (e.g., ‘picturesque views’ not ‘picturesque will’). Keep it to 2–4 concise sentences.

範例: Yes. I prefer sitting by the window because I enjoy looking at the scenery during the journey. For example, on flights or long bus trips I like watching picturesque views like mountains or rivers because it helps me relax and makes the trip more enjoyable.

建議: Begin with a clear direct answer, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct word choice and grammar (e.g., ‘short trips’, ‘because my parents were busy’, ‘Bangkok to Pattaya’). Use linking words (because, so, for example) and avoid excessive hesitations. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I did have family journeys when I was a child, but they were usually short. Because my parents were busy with their family business, we often took quick round trips—for example, from Bangkok to Pattaya—so we didn’t have much time to explore.

× Yes, I always prefer sitting by the window to sitting near the aisle because I want to watch or enjoy the moment like for example like picturesque location, picturesque will is mainly. Like the journal is starting.

✓ Yes, I always prefer sitting by the window rather than near the aisle because I want to enjoy the view, such as picturesque locations, especially when the journey is starting.

Multiple errors: incorrect conjunction/word choice and repetition ('to sitting near the aisle' is acceptable but 'rather than near the aisle' is clearer) relates to grammar problem type 16 (Incorrect conjunction use) and 26 (Sentence structure errors). Also incorrect word forms and vocabulary ('watch or enjoy the moment' -> 'enjoy the view'; 'picturesque will is mainly' and 'journal' -> 'journey') are sentence structure and word choice problems. Suggestion: Use 'rather than' for clear comparison, replace awkward phrases with standard expressions ('enjoy the view', 'picturesque locations', 'when the journey is starting'). Ensure each idea is expressed in a complete, grammatically correct clause.

× I think I had when I was really, really young like a torders because my parents always busy for family business so we have like a short journal like row, go and back, like row way like Bangkok to Patia because we have few time to enjoy.

✓ I think I did when I was really young, like toddlers, because my parents were always busy with the family business, so we only had short journeys, going and coming back, for example from Bangkok to Pattaya, because we had little time to enjoy.

Main issues: incorrect verb tense and forms (use of 'had' without object and 'always busy' missing auxiliary 'were' — Grammar problem type 5 Past tense issue and 27 Subject-verb agreement), incorrect word choice and spelling ('torders' -> 'toddlers', 'journal' -> 'journey', 'Patia' -> 'Pattaya'), and preposition usage ('busy for' -> 'busy with') which is type 11 Incorrect use of prepositions. Suggestions: Use past simple consistently for past events ('I did' or 'I did have' but better 'I did'), ensure correct auxiliary verbs for past descriptions ('were always busy'), use 'with' after 'busy', use 'short journeys' for plural, and correct place names spelling.