旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and clear, but a few improvements would raise your score. Make the structure more concise by starting with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “Now I prefer the aisle seat.”), then add one or two specific reasons linked with a connector (e.g., “because” or “so”). Avoid redundancy (don’t repeat age-related phrases) and use a slightly wider range of vocabulary such as “aisle seat,” “restroom,” or “long-haul flight.” Keep it to 2–3 sentences to sound natural and effective.

範例: Now I prefer the aisle seat because I need to use the restroom frequently on long-haul flights. For example, on a 10–12 hour trip I find it much easier to get up without disturbing other passengers.

建議: The answer is understandable and relevant but could be improved by separating the two ideas more clearly: first directly answer the question about childhood, then add the contrasting information about your current travel habits using a linking word like “however” or “now.” Be more specific about what “long journey” means in childhood (e.g., road trip, holiday abroad) or state you didn’t take such trips. Use precise terms like “long-haul flights” and avoid repeating similar words (e.g., “long journey” and “long haul”). Keep to two sentences.

範例: No, I don't remember taking any long journeys with my family when I was a child. However, now that I work and travel frequently, I often take long-haul flights of around 13 hours for business.

× I used to prefer sitting by the window when I was still younger, but as I grew older I prefer to sit in the aisle because I use the washroom very frequently, especially if it's a long flight.

✓ I used to prefer sitting by the window when I was younger, but as I grew older I preferred to sit in the aisle because I used the washroom very frequently, especially on long flights.

The sentence mixes past habitual 'used to' with present simple 'prefer' and 'use' inconsistently. Maintain past tense when contrasting past preference with later change: use 'preferred' and 'used' for past habits. Also 'when I was still younger' is wordy; 'when I was younger' is clearer. Use 'on long flights' instead of 'if it's a long flight' to match plural 'flights' mentioned earlier and to avoid switching tense. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent when describing past habits and changes; use 'used to' or past simple consistently.

× I cannot recall a long journey with my family when I was a child, but since I'm working now and I travel a lot, I usually do long haul flights like 13 hour flights.

✓ I cannot recall a long journey with my family when I was a child, but since I'm working now and I travel a lot, I usually take long-haul flights of about 13 hours.

The phrase 'do long haul flights' is unnatural; use 'take' for flights. 'Long haul' is typically hyphenated as an adjective before 'flights'. 'Like 13 hour flights' is awkward and needs plural agreement and duration format: '13-hour flights' or 'flights of about 13 hours.' Also keep 'I cannot recall' present tense is fine as it refers to memory, and 'since I'm working now' justifies present habitual 'usually take.' Suggestion: Use natural collocations ('take flights') and correct hyphenation and duration expression.