旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is natural, relevant and concise with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. To improve further, vary your vocabulary and add a brief connective to make the list flow more smoothly (for example, use words like “for example,” “such as,” or “also”), and avoid repeating simple words (e.g., use “urban views” instead of repeating “city”). Also try to include a short personal feeling or comparison to show deeper engagement.

範例: I usually choose a window seat when I travel because I love watching the changing scenery. For example, I enjoy the rolling countryside and quaint houses, as well as urban views like high-rise buildings and busy streets; sometimes I even spot wildlife, which makes the trip feel more relaxing and enjoyable.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but is unclear and contains grammatical errors and incomplete phrases. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, correcting grammar (use past tense consistently), and adding one or two specific supporting details (when it happened, how you felt, or what you remember). Use linking words such as “because,” “so,” or “for example” to make the response coherent. Keep it to under five sentences.

範例: Yes. The most memorable long journey with my family was when we moved from another city to the one we live in now when I was eight. It was a tiring but exciting trip because we traveled by car for several hours and I remember feeling both nervous and curious about our new home.

× As a child, the only thing I remember that includes our long journey is when we move from the other city to the city where we live right now.

✓ As a child, the only long journey I remember is when we moved from the other city to the city where we live now.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Move' is present; change to 'moved'. Also simplify the structure: 'the only thing I remember that includes our long journey' is awkward; 'the only long journey I remember' is clearer. 'Right now' can be shortened to 'now' for naturalness.

× So that's the only thing I remember us traveling as a family because we all we usually.

✓ So that's the only time I remember us traveling as a family because we didn't usually travel together.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'That's the only thing I remember us traveling as a family' has incorrect structure; use 'the only time I remember us traveling as a family'. The fragment 'because we all we usually' is incorrect; likely intended meaning is that the family did not usually travel together, so 'because we didn't usually travel together' corrects tense and word order. Also use past tense 'didn't' to match recollection of childhood.