旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce redundancy, correct grammar, and use linking words to make the answer clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting reasons with linking words (for example, because / also). Watch verb forms and word choice (e.g., 'take photos' not 'take promoted pictures'). Keep the response within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I usually prefer a window seat when I travel because I enjoy watching the scenery pass by. Also, I find it easier to rest my head against the window on long journeys. For short trips, I like a window seat so I can take photos of interesting views.

建議: Use correct past tense and clearer sentence structure. Begin with a concise topic sentence in past simple, then add a specific example with details and a linking word (for example, 'for example' or 'for instance'). Avoid vague phrases like 'it's too fun'—describe why it was enjoyable. Keep to 3–4 sentences maximum.

範例: Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was a child. For example, during one spring holiday we travelled by train to another city, and the trip lasted several hours. It was special because we spent quality time together playing games and watching the countryside, which I still remember fondly.

× Yes, I do prefer sitting by the window while travelling as it is a good way to look at the beautiful view going by and it is also a good way to rest my head if I needed to also I can take promoted pictures of the view going back.

✓ Yes, I prefer sitting by the window while travelling because it is a good way to look at the beautiful scenery passing by, and it is also a good place to rest my head if I need to. I can also take better pictures of the view on the way back.

Multiple issues: 'do prefer sitting' is grammatically acceptable but wordy; using simple 'prefer' is more natural. 'travelling' is fine. 'view going by' is incorrect word choice and word order; use 'scenery passing by'. 'if I needed to' mixes past with present context; use present 'if I need to'. 'promoted pictures' is wrong word; likely 'better' or 'good' pictures. Also run-on sentence; split into two. Fixing -ing usage: 'sitting' is fine but some gerund phrases and verb forms needed adjustment for tense and meaning. Suggestions: use simpler verb forms, correct collocations (scenery passing by, take better pictures), maintain consistent tense and split long sentences for clarity.

× Yes, I do have a long journey with my family as a child. For example, when my spring holidays are there we went to another city through train and it was a beautiful journey that took a precious time for me as the family spend its time together and it's too fun.

✓ Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was a child. For example, during my spring holidays we went to another city by train, and it was a beautiful journey that was precious to me because the family spent time together and it was great fun.

Tense and agreement errors: 'do have' is present but referring to past; use past 'had'. 'as a child' should be 'when I was a child'. 'when my spring holidays are there' is ungrammatical; use 'during my spring holidays'. 'through train' is wrong preposition and noun form; use 'by train'. 'took a precious time for me' is awkward; use 'was precious to me'. 'family spend its time' has subject-verb agreement and possessive issues; use 'the family spent time together'. 'it's too fun' mixes present with past and informal; use 'it was great fun'. Suggestions: maintain past tense consistently, fix prepositions and collocations, ensure subject-verb agreement, and avoid literal translations.