旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: ・応答は直接的で良いですが、文法ミスと不自然な表現が多いです（例："By sitting the window" → "sitting by the window"、"random escape of the country" は不明瞭）。 ・文は短くまとめつつ、接続語（for example, because, so）を使って理由を明確にしましょう。 ・語彙はシンプルで構いませんが、場所や感情を正確に表す語（scenery, landscape, relaxing, enjoyable）を使うと良いです。 ・発話は最大5文に収め、主題文（I prefer...）→ 理由 → 具体例 の順に構成してください。

範例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel. I like looking at the landscape because it changes a lot and is often very beautiful. For example, I enjoy watching mountains, rivers, and small villages pass by. This helps me relax and makes the journey more enjoyable.

建議: ・回答の時制と語順が不自然です（"I've been" は現在完了で不適切、過去形で述べるべき）。 ・場所名を列挙する際は繰り返しを避け、正確な表現にしましょう（"France France" は誤り）。 ・もう少し具体的な情報（行った時期、どんな経験をしたか、思い出に残る出来事）を加えると高得点につながります。 ・接続語（for example, when I was about... , we visited... , I remember...）を使って話の流れを作ってください。

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my family and I took several long trips abroad, for example to Spain, France and Singapore. I remember visiting museums in Paris and enjoying the beaches in Spain, which was exciting for me. These trips helped me learn about different cultures and created many happy memories.

× By sitting the window, I can watch the very beautiful random escape of the country.

✓ By sitting by the window, I can watch the beautiful, ever-changing scenery of the countryside.

The original sentence has multiple issues: the preposition 'by' is missing before 'the window' (preposition error, but per instructions only correct types listed — however the main listed type to apply here is 'Verb + -ing form' because 'By sitting the window' uses -ing after 'by' incorrectly without preposition; also several word choice errors: 'random escape of the country' is unnatural. Correction: add 'by' after 'sitting', change 'the country' to 'the countryside', and replace 'random escape' with 'ever-changing scenery' or 'scenery' for natural meaning. Suggestion: use 'By sitting by the window' or 'Sitting by the window' and use natural collocations like 'watch the scenery' or 'watch the landscape change'. Note: Improve fluency by removing redundant modifiers ('very beautiful') and using accurate nouns ('countryside' not 'country' for scenery).

× It makes me very enjoyable.

✓ It makes me very happy.

'Enjoyable' is an adjective describing something that causes enjoyment; it is incorrect to say 'It makes me enjoyable' because the subject 'me' is a person who feels an emotion. Use an adjective that describes a person's feeling such as 'happy' or 'enjoyed' (e.g., 'I feel very happy' or 'I really enjoy it'). Suggestion: say 'It makes me very happy' or 'I really enjoy it'. Note: This fixes adjective choice and collocation with 'makes me'.

× Yes, when I was a child I've been to the outdoor countries with my family such as Spain and France France and Singapore.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I went abroad with my family to countries such as Spain, France and Singapore.

The original mixes past simple context ('when I was a child') with present perfect ('I've been to'), which is inconsistent. Use past simple 'I went' to match the finished time in childhood. Also 'the outdoor countries' is unnatural; use 'abroad' or 'other countries'. Remove duplicated 'France' and list countries with commas. Suggestion: use 'I went abroad with my family to countries such as Spain, France and Singapore' or 'I visited Spain, France and Singapore with my family when I was a child'. Note: This addresses tense consistency and word choice.