旅行— Part 1 評分報告
對話
Part 1
考官
Do you prefer to sit by the window when travelling?
考生
Yes, I really enjoy sitting by the window when traveling because not only can I breathe the fresh and cold air, but it allows me to immerse myself into the picture. Picturesque, umm, surroundings, environments.
考官
Did you have a long journey with your family as a child?
考生
Yes, as a child I have a memorable trip with my family to Dana City is not only connected all the members of my family together, but also helps them to forget all of the stresses of work and studies.
評估
總分
Part 1
Do you prefer to sit by the window when travelling?
分數: 72.0建議: Câu trả lời tự nhiên và liên quan nhưng cần rút gọn để tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi nhỏ về ngữ pháp. Hãy mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng từ nối hợp lý (for example, also) và tránh tiếng ồm ồm như "umm". Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về cảnh vật bạn thấy để làm câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn. Giữ độ dài tối đa 4-5 câu.
範例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy the view and fresh air. For example, I like watching mountains and rivers pass by, which helps me relax and feel connected to the journey. Also, I often take photos of the scenery to remember the trip.
Did you have a long journey with your family as a child?
分數: 66.0建議: Câu trả lời chứa ý tốt nhưng cấu trúc câu lẫn thì bị sai (should use past tense consistently) và câu quá dài, cần chia thành câu ngắn hơn. Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề nói rõ thời điểm và điểm đến, sau đó nêu lý do vì sao chuyến đi đáng nhớ với ví dụ cụ thể (hoạt động, kỷ niệm). Tránh dùng cấu trúc mơ hồ như "is not only... but also" khi đang nói về quá khứ.
範例: Yes, I had a long and memorable trip with my family when I was a child. We visited Dana City and spent a week exploring local markets and parks. The trip brought us closer together because we shared activities like hiking and eating meals together, which helped us forget about work and school worries.
文法
× Yes, as a child I have a memorable trip with my family to Dana City is not only connected all the members of my family together, but also helps them to forget all of the stresses of work and studies.
✓ Yes, as a child I had a memorable trip with my family to Dana City that not only connected all the members of my family together, but also helped us forget all of the stresses of work and study.
The original sentence uses the present perfect 'have' with 'a memorable trip' which is incorrect for a specific past event; the simple past 'had' should be used (Past tense issue). 'Is' is incorrectly linking the clause; a relative pronoun 'that' is needed to connect the noun 'trip' with the clauses describing it (Sentence structure error). Verb forms in the second clause should match past tense ('helped') to maintain consistent past narration. 'Studies' as a noun is better as 'study' in this general context. Suggestion: use simple past for specific past events, use 'that' or 'which' to introduce relative clauses, and keep verb tenses consistent within the sentence.
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