旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I prefer window seats) then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect grammar (use correct tense and pronouns). Aim for 2–4 sentences, using linking words like 'because' or 'so' and concrete details (e.g. scenery, privacy, photography).

範例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when travelling because I enjoy the scenery. For example, I like watching cities and landscapes pass by, and it is easier to take photos or relax without being disturbed by other passengers.

建議: Answer clearly with a topic sentence, then add specific supporting details such as destination, who went, how long it lasted and what you enjoyed. Use correct past tense and count nouns properly. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'with' and 'for example' to make it coherent.

範例: Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was a child; we travelled to Italy for two weeks. I went with my parents, two brothers and two sisters, and I especially enjoyed visiting historic cities and trying local food.

× When I traveling, I like when you see it, because when you see it as very perfect, as very important part, enjoy the cities and when the seat you can see a lot of cities and a lot of.

✓ When I am traveling, I like to sit by the window because you can see the scenery; it is a very beautiful and important part of the trip, and from the seat you can see many cities and places.

The original sentence omits the auxiliary verb 'am' with the present participle 'traveling' (error type 10). Also the clause 'I like when you see it' is ungrammatical: use 'I like to sit by the window because you can see...' to express purpose/benefit. 'A lot of' needs a noun following it, so replace with 'many cities and places'. Improve coherence by splitting into clearer clauses and using correct verbs and articles. Suggestions: include the auxiliary verb with -ing forms (I am traveling), use infinitive to express preferences (I like to sit), ensure nouns follow quantifiers ('a lot of' + noun), and simplify clauses for clarity.

× Uh, yes, I went to Italy with my uh family and I have a children, uh, four children, twos my brothers and twas my sisters and I really, I really enjoyed there.

✓ Yes, I went to Italy with my family when I was a child; I have four siblings — two brothers and two sisters — and I really enjoyed it there.

Multiple issues: 'I have a children' and 'twos my brothers and twas my sisters' misuse plural forms and numerals (type 1 Singular and plural issue and type 22 Article errors). The phrase 'I really enjoyed there' misuses the verb: with 'enjoy' we need an object or use 'enjoyed it there' (type 5 Past tense issue and type 26 Sentence structure errors). The correction uses past tense 'went', clarifies 'when I was a child', fixes plural nouns 'four siblings', and provides proper pronouns and word order. Suggestions: use correct plural forms, use 'it' after 'enjoyed' when referring to the trip, and structure the sentence with commas or dashes for clarity.