旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce repetition and hesitations, give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons using linking words. Focus on correct vocabulary (e.g. "window seat") and simple, coherent sentences. For example: state preference, then explain with a specific reason and an example.

範例: I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy the views. For example, on a flight I can watch the coastline and cities below, which makes the journey more interesting. Also, I find it more relaxing to look outside rather than stare at the aisle.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence stating the trip, then add one or two specific details (where, who, what you did, and why it was enjoyable). Use linking words like "because" or "for example" and avoid fillers. Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

範例: Yes. I went on a long trip to Italy with my family when I was a child. We visited Rome and Florence, explored museums and tried local food, which I enjoyed because it was exciting to see historical sites and spend time with my father and siblings.

× Yes, when I travel when I travel, I like windy seed because when you see it uh, you can see all the views and you can see all the countries you uh used to enjoy in this uh uh when you see it because when does it I like more like much like a vendor seat and.

✓ Yes, when I travel, I like window seats because you can see the views and the places I used to enjoy.

Errors: repeated phrase 'when I travel when I travel' (sentence structure/redundancy), 'windy seed' is a mispronunciation of 'window seat' (word choice), overuse of filler words and broken clauses. Tense: present simple is appropriate for habitual preference. Suggestion: remove repetitions and fillers, use 'window seat' and clear clauses: 'I like window seats because you can see the views and the places I used to enjoy.' Keep present simple for habitual actions.

× Yes, I had a long journey, uh, when I, umm, I was going to Italy, uh, with my family, with my father.

✓ Yes, I had a long journey when I went to Italy with my family and my father.

Use past simple 'went' for a completed action in the past rather than progressive 'was going' in this context. Remove fillers 'uh, umm' and redundant 'with my family, with my father' by combining them. Suggestion: use concise past simple 'I went to Italy with my family and my father.'

× I, I'm so a lot of enjoy with my family.

✓ I enjoyed it a lot with my family.

Incorrect word order and wrong forms: 'so a lot of enjoy' is ungrammatical. Use past tense verb 'enjoyed' and adverbial phrase 'a lot' after the verb. Suggestion: 'I enjoyed it a lot with my family.'

× That's uh, that's was a good, uh, that was a good and very good journey with my family and children.

✓ That was a very good journey with my family and the children.

Error: 'that's was' mixes present and past; use past simple 'That was'. Redundancy 'a good, that was a good and very good' should be streamlined. Also specify 'the children' if referring to particular children. Suggestion: 'That was a very good journey with my family and the children.'