旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và phát âm, tổ chức câu rõ ràng hơn, dùng câu chủ đề rồi đưa chi tiết hỗ trợ ngắn gọn. Tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ phù hợp (because, so, and, for example). Hãy nói tối đa 3-4 câu, nêu rõ lý do và mô tả cụ thể một vài cảnh quan bạn thấy.

範例: I usually prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy looking at the scenery. For example, I like seeing open fields and forests, which makes me feel peaceful. Also, from the window I can watch villages and rivers pass by, which is very relaxing.

建議: Cải thiện thì động từ và cấu trúc câu quá khứ, nói rõ thời gian và địa điểm, dùng câu chủ đề ngắn rồi thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh câu rời rạc và lặp ý; dùng liên từ như when, after, because để nối ý rõ ràng.

範例: Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was a child. We traveled to the northern region for a holiday, and I clearly remember visiting small villages and beautiful mountains. The trip was special because we spent a lot of time together and I still remember the views and family meals.

× Let me think for a second I prefer sit down by the new window when I travel lane because I can see the piece see the view in out the out there and I can and I can see peaceful and I can see the field I can see the view very wood.

✓ Let me think for a second. I prefer sitting by the window when I travel because I can see the view out there; it is peaceful and I can see the fields and woods.

Student used the base form 'sit' after 'prefer'. In English, after prefer we typically use the gerund (verb+ing) when stating a general preference: 'prefer sitting'. Also there are many extra/repeated words and wrong word choices ('new window', 'travel lane', 'piece see', 'in out the out there', 'very wood'). Simplify phrases and choose correct nouns: 'window', 'travel', 'view out there', 'peaceful', 'fields', 'woods'. Suggestions: use gerund after prefer, remove repetitions, pick correct nouns, and break into clearer sentences.

× I will have a long journey with my family as I was a joy.

✓ I had a long journey with my family when I was a child.

Student used 'will have' (future) and 'as I was a joy' (incorrect phrase) to refer to a past experience. The question asks about childhood, so past simple is required: 'I had'. Also 'as I was a joy' is incorrect; likely meant 'when I was a child'. Suggestion: use past simple for past events and correct time phrase 'when I was a child'.

× I go to North.

✓ I went to the north.

Student used present simple 'I go' to describe a past trip. Use past simple 'went' for completed actions in the past. Capitalization: 'north' as a direction is lowercase unless part of a proper name. Suggestion: use past tense and correct capitalization.

× I go to USI with my family and I will travel journey with my family and there is very first and I can remember there and they can

✓ I went to the USA with my family. That was my first long trip and I can still remember it.

Sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. 'USI' is likely 'USA'; 'I go' should be past 'I went'. 'I will travel journey' mixes tenses and is redundant. 'There is very first' is incorrect structure; use 'That was my first long trip'. 'I can remember there' should be 'I can still remember it'. Suggestions: correct proper noun (USA), use past simple for past events, remove redundancy, and use clear subject-pronoun references.