旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes, I prefer window seats.), avoid repetition and incorrect words (e.g. 'resolve' and 'not the aisle'), use linking phrases to add brief reasons, and correct grammar (articles, plural forms, and verb tenses). Keep to 2–4 sentences and give a specific example of what you enjoy seeing. Pronunciation practice of key words (window, aisle, landscapes) will help clarity.

範例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel. I enjoy looking at the landscapes from above, such as mountains and coastlines, and I often take photos to remember the trip. For example, on my last flight I took several pictures of a sunset over the clouds.

建議: Answer directly and organize ideas with clear tense and connectors. Start with a simple statement (No, I didn't have long journeys as a child.), explain briefly why with specific details (we usually drove to nearby prefectures by car), and end with a clear future plan using correct grammar (I want to travel abroad in the future). Avoid invented words ('Abload') and keep sentences concise.

範例: No, I didn't have long journeys with my family when I was a child. We usually traveled by car to nearby prefectures for a few days, so we never took long trips. In the future I hope to get a passport and travel abroad for a longer holiday.

× Yes, I prefer to resolve not the aisle.

✓ Yes, I prefer the window seat, not the aisle.

The student used 'resolve' incorrectly and the preposition/phrase structure is wrong. Use 'prefer X, not Y' to contrast choices. Also use 'window seat' as noun phrase rather than 'to resolve not the aisle'. Suggestion: Say 'I prefer the window seat, not the aisle.'

× I take a window seat because I like seeing landscapes from for example from sky on their plane and I want to take a pictures to memorize after traveling.

✓ I take a window seat because I like seeing landscapes from the sky on the plane, and I want to take pictures to remember the trip later.

Multiple preposition and article errors: use 'from the sky' and 'on the plane' (not 'from sky on their plane'). 'A pictures' is wrong: 'pictures' plural without 'a'. 'To memorize after traveling' is unnatural; use 'to remember the trip later.' Suggestion: Use 'from the sky' and 'on the plane' and remove incorrect articles: 'take pictures to remember the trip.'

× I can I can recall it so I like window view.

✓ I can recall it, so I like the window view.

The sentence repeats 'I can' and lacks articles. Remove repetition and add 'the' before 'window view.' Also add comma before 'so' for clarity. Suggestion: 'I can recall it, so I like the window view.'

× Did you have a long journey with your family as a child? (context answer) Actually no, at least it takes a few days because we always use a car and go to near Prefecture only, so I have to experience such a long trip.

✓ Actually no, it never took more than a few days because we always used a car and only went to nearby prefectures, so I haven't experienced a long trip.

Tense inconsistency: question asks about the past ('Did you have... as a child'), so reply should use past simple ('took', 'used', 'went') and present perfect for experience ('haven't experienced'). Also fix prepositions and word order: 'near Prefecture' -> 'nearby prefectures'. Suggestion: Use past simple for habitual past actions and present perfect for life experience.

× But in future I got a passport and I take a long journey to the Abload.

✓ But in the future I will get a passport and I will take a long trip abroad.

Incorrect tense and word choice: 'got' is past; for future use 'will get'. 'I take' should be future 'I will take'. 'Abload' is misspelling of 'abroad'. Also add article 'the' in 'in the future' and use 'long trip' rather than 'long journey to the abroad.' Suggestion: Use 'in the future' and 'will' for future plans: 'I will get a passport and I will take a long trip abroad.'