旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details with a linking word. Use singular/plural correctly and vary vocabulary (e.g., "scenery, mountains, and villages"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I love watching the scenery. For example, I often enjoy seeing mountains and small villages pass by, which helps me relax. Also, I sometimes take photos of interesting views.

建議: Provide a direct answer first, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unnecessary personal comments and long run-on sentences; use correct grammar and pronoun forms. Mention a specific long journey memory if possible to make the response more concrete.

範例: Yes, I did have long journeys with my family when I was a child. For example, we once traveled for six hours by car to visit relatives, and I enjoyed sitting with my grandmother, cooking together at our destination and watching TV in the evenings. These trips helped me bond with my family.

× I enjoy sitting by the window because I enjoy looking out for landscapes, scenery, mountain, village or everything on the journey.

✓ I enjoy sitting by the window because I like looking out at landscapes, scenery, mountains, villages, or anything on the journey.

The sentence mixes singular and plural nouns inconsistently. 'Mountain' and 'village' should be plural ('mountains, villages') to match the plural 'landscapes' and to indicate general observations. Also 'looking out for' is incorrect here; use 'looking out at' or 'looking at'. Use 'like' instead of repeating 'enjoy' to improve style.

× I enjoy sitting by the window because I enjoy looking out for landscapes, scenery, mountain, village or everything on the journey.

✓ I enjoy sitting by the window because I like looking out at landscapes, scenery, mountains, villages, or anything on the journey.

The phrasal verb 'look out for' means to watch for something expected; here the intended meaning is to observe passing views, so 'look out at' or 'look at' is correct. Use consistent plural nouns as noted above.

× Yes of course because personally I'm a guy that loves spending time with family especially with my grandma cause both of my parents are always out to go to work and I'm also home alone with my grandma so I love spending time with her cooking and watching TV.

✓ Yes, of course. Personally, I'm a guy who loves spending time with my family, especially with my grandma, because both of my parents are always out working, and I'm often at home with my grandma, so I love spending time with her cooking and watching TV.

Use 'who' not 'that' for people. Add commas and break into clearer clauses. 'Cause' is informal; use 'because'. 'Out to go to work' is awkward: use 'out working' or 'at work'. 'I'm also home alone with my grandma' is better as 'I'm often at home with my grandma' for clarity and tense consistency.

× Yes of course because personally I'm a guy that loves spending time with family especially with my grandma cause both of my parents are always out to go to work and I'm also home alone with my grandma so I love spending time with her cooking and watching TV.

✓ Yes, of course. Personally, I'm a guy who loves spending time with my family, especially with my grandma, because both of my parents are always out working, and I'm often at home with my grandma, so I love spending time with her cooking and watching TV.

Pronoun and noun consistency: include 'my' before 'family' and avoid repeating 'my grandma' so frequently; restructure sentence for clarity. Use 'who' for people and ensure pronoun references clearly point to the same person.