旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and fluency: remove redundant words, correct verb forms and articles, and use linking phrase to connect ideas. Keep answer concise (max 5 sentences) and natural. Specifically, say that you usually choose the window, give one clear reason and a brief consequence. Practice reducing hesitations and repetitions (e.g., “help help helps”).

範例: I usually pay extra to book a window seat when I travel because I enjoy seeing landmarks and scenery along the way. For example, looking out at cities and mountains makes long journeys more interesting, so I feel less bored and more relaxed.

建議: Correct tense and sentence structure; be specific and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence (past simple for past events), then give concise supporting details with linking words (e.g., “we stayed for…”, “especially”). Provide precise durations and one or two specific memories. Avoid repeating numbers and filler phrases.

範例: Yes. When I was ten, my parents and I took a long trip to Chengdu. We spent two days traveling there and ten days exploring the city; for example, I remember visiting Wen Shu Temple because it was very beautiful and peaceful.

× I pay for to book a seat by the window when I travel.

✓ I pay to book a seat by the window when I travel.

The phrase 'pay for to book' is incorrect. After 'pay' when followed by a verb meaning to purchase a service you use the infinitive without 'for' (pay to book). Use 'pay to book' or 'pay for a seat'. Suggestion: say 'I pay to book a seat' or 'I pay for a window seat.'

× It also helps help helps me feel less bored during long journey.

✓ It also helps me feel less bored during long journeys.

There is a repeated word 'help' which is a typographical/repetition error and 'long journey' requires an article or plural. Here 'during long journeys' is natural to describe repeated experiences; alternatively 'during a long journey' with the article 'a' is also correct. Remove the extra 'help' and use correct article/plural form.

× Yes, I have a long journey with my parents when I when was 10 years old and we spend 10 days 10, we spend 2 days go to Chengdu and spend 10 days to look around there.

✓ Yes, I had a long journey with my parents when I was 10 years old. We spent two days getting to Chengdu and ten days exploring the area.

The sentence mixes present tense ('have', 'spend') with past time reference 'when I was 10 years old'. Use past tense ('had', 'was', 'spent') for completed past events. Also correct word order: 'when I was 10 years old' not 'when I when was'. Use 'getting to Chengdu' or 'traveling to Chengdu' for the journey to the city and 'exploring the area' for looking around.

× Especially the Wen Shu Temple is very beautiful.

✓ Especially, the Wenshu Temple is very beautiful.

Name formatting and article placement: 'Wenshu Temple' is a proper noun commonly written as one word 'Wenshu'. Adding a comma after 'Especially' improves clarity. Use the definite article 'the' with specific well-known temples, which is acceptable here. Alternatively: 'The Wenshu Temple was especially beautiful.' if keeping past tense consistent with previous sentence.