旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and slightly expand with a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail. Avoid informal filler like "and that's it." Use a linking word to connect reasons and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel. I enjoy looking at the scenery because it helps me relax and makes the journey more enjoyable. For example, on flights I like watching the clouds and on bus trips I like seeing the countryside roll by.

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g., "pommelium") and replace them with precise descriptions like "family gatherings" or "special celebrations."

範例: Yes, my family often took long journeys when I was a child. We usually traveled to visit relatives for birthday celebrations, and I remember playing with cousins and collecting photos as keepsakes, which created lasting memories.

× Yes, I like to sit by the window when traveling either a bus or plane so I can enjoy the view and that's it.

✓ Yes, I like to sit by the window when traveling by either a bus or a plane so I can enjoy the view.

Error type: incorrect use of prepositions and missing article. The student used 'when traveling either a bus or plane' which omits the required preposition 'by' before the modes of transport and omits the indefinite article before singular count nouns. Correct form is 'traveling by either a bus or a plane'. Also 'and that's it' is unnecessary in this context and can be omitted for a natural response. Suggestion: use 'traveling by' with 'a' before 'bus' and 'plane', and remove extraneous phrases.

× Yes, we did. I remember when I was a child we're going to meet the relatives to celebrate the birthdays and to get the memories were the pommelium.

✓ Yes, we did. I remember when I was a child we would go to visit relatives to celebrate birthdays and make memories during the pommelium.

Error type: incorrect tense and awkward phrasing. The original mixes present contraction 'we're' with past reference and uses 'going to meet' incorrectly; 'we would go' or 'we used to go' fits past habitual action. 'Meet the relatives' can be 'visit relatives'. 'To get the memories were the pommelium' is unclear and ungrammatical; assuming the intended idea is 'to make memories during the pommelium' (if pommelium is the event), rephrase accordingly. Suggestion: use past habitual 'would go' or 'used to go' for repeated past actions, use 'visit relatives', and rephrase unclear noun phrases into clear actions like 'make memories during X'.