旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 在回答中注意语法和用词的准确性，保持句子自然流畅；避免重复信息并使用连接词使句子更连贯。同时纠正表达错误（如“risk against the window”“sit outside”）并尽量控制答案长度在最多五句内。可以先给出直接回答，然后用一到两句具体理由或例子支持。

範例: Yes, I usually prefer a window seat because it lets me enjoy the passing scenery. For example, on long train rides I like watching landscapes change, which helps me relax. Also, when I’m tired I can rest my head against the window and sleep more comfortably.

建議: 内容上有诚实的个人经历，但语法错误和表达不清影响理解。注意时态和主谓一致（例如：’parents were’，’my brother and I took’），避免不相关或可能冒犯的细节（如‘didn't read the books’可换成更中性表述）。结构上先直接回答，然后用1–2句具体细节支持，确保句子不超过五句。

範例: No, I didn’t go on long trips with my parents when I was a child because our family had limited money. However, after I finished high school, my brother and I took them on a holiday to thank them for their support.

× Of course I like to sit by window because in this way I can see the scenery on the road.

✓ Of course I like to sit by the window because in this way I can see the scenery on the road.

这里缺少定冠词“the”。在英语中，表示特指的可数名词单数前需要加定冠词。句中“window”指的是车窗这一特定位置，应使用“the window”。建议：遇到说到特定的事物或对话中已明确的事物时，在单数可数名词前加“the”。

× When I'm tired, I can risk against the window.

✓ When I'm tired, I can rest against the window.

原句中“risk”用错了词，且与语境不符。这里应使用动词“rest”（靠、休息），并保留定冠词“the”。因此改为“rest against the window”。建议：注意选择与语境匹配的动词，并在提及特定窗口时使用“the”。

× If I sit outside, my hand will shake anywhere and my neck will be sorry.

✓ If I sit outside, my hand will shake and my neck will ache.

“sit outside”可能不合语境（应为坐在窗外与坐在窗边对比，但原句想表达坐在外侧会不舒服，仍保留）；“shake anywhere” 不正确，副词“anywhere”与“shake”搭配不自然，应省略或用更具体表达；“my neck will be sorry”为中文式表达，英语应使用“my neck will ache”。建议：用常见搭配如“shake”直接接宾语或不接，描述疼痛用动词“ache”或“hurt”。

× I didn't travel with my parents when I was a child because my parents was very poor and my parents didn't read the books and didn't know how to write.

✓ I didn't travel with my parents when I was a child because my parents were very poor and didn't read books or know how to write.

主谓不一致：复数主语“my parents”应与动词“were”搭配，而不是“was”。另外，重复使用“my parents”冗余，可省略第二、第三处；“read the books”不自然，改为“read books”；并用“or”连接两项不会写的能力更自然。建议：注意复数主语应使用复数动词，并避免不必要重复。

× But when I grow up, when I graduate from high school, my brother and I takes my parents on a trip.

✓ But when I grew up and graduated from high school, my brother and I took my parents on a trip.

时态错误：句首使用过去时间背景（“when I grew up, when I graduated”）应使用过去式，而不是一般现在时“grow”/“graduate”。同时与复数主语“my brother and I”搭配的动词应为过去式“took”，不是“takes”。建议：描述过去发生的动作时使用过去式，并确保主语与动词形式一致。

× We are.

✓ We did.

原句“We are.”不完整且不符合上下文。考生想表达“我们（带父母去旅行）”已经做了，应以过去式简短回答“We did.”或更完整“We did.”/“We did that.”。建议：根据上下文选择完整的句子，避免使用不完整或模糊的短句。