旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is short and unclear due to pronunciation errors, hesitations, and unclear vocabulary. Give a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, I), and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because / so / when). Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences. Practice pronouncing key words (window, scenery, prefer) and replace unclear words with simple correct ones.

範例: Yes, I usually prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy the scenery. For example, I like watching mountains and rivers pass by, which helps me relax. So sitting by the window makes journeys more interesting and peaceful.

建議: Your response shows you can communicate an idea but it is repetitive and has many pronunciation/place-name errors and missing clear linking. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add two specific details (where you went and what you did) using linking words such as "for example" or "because." Avoid repeating phrases and practice correct names or describe them if unsure. Keep sentences concise and coherent.

範例: Yes. When I was a child, I went on a long trip with my family to Chaflong, a scenic hill town in Bangladesh. For example, we hiked to viewpoints and visited tea gardens, which I remember fondly. That trip was special because we spent a lot of time together and saw beautiful landscapes.

× Yes, obviously, why not? I prefer Los and Ossett and Ossetian A cause, uh, when I was sitting in or inside Angel, uh, I, I singing, uh, I think nice scenery and.

✓ Yes, obviously. I prefer to sit by the window because when I am on a plane or a train I can see the nice scenery and enjoy it.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure problems (ID 26). It contains run-on fragments, unclear references (Los and Ossett and Ossetian A cause), incorrect verb forms (I singing), and unclear prepositions (in or inside Angel). Correction organizes ideas into clear clauses, uses correct infinitive form 'prefer to sit', correct present continuous for temporary action 'when I am on a plane or a train', and a suitable verb 'enjoy'. Suggestion: simplify thoughts, use complete clauses, choose correct prepositions for vehicles (on a plane/train), and use proper verb forms (prefer + infinitive, I was singing -> I sang or I was singing when appropriate).

× As obviously when I am a child, I am a when I am child, I go to AOI go to visit my visit in Chafran with my family and Chaflong uh, Chaflong uh is a beautiful place in Baghdad, the beautiful tourist place in Bangladesh. It is located in Silat near.

✓ When I was a child, I used to go with my family to visit Chaflong. Chaflong is a beautiful tourist place in Bangladesh. It is located near Sylhet.

The original sentence mixes present and past tenses and has many structural problems; the primary error is incorrect tense usage (ID 5). The speaker should use past tense to talk about childhood habits: 'When I was a child' and 'I used to go'. Also corrected place names and prepositions: 'in Bangladesh' and 'near Sylhet' (not 'Silat'). Suggestion: when describing past habitual actions, use past simple or 'used to'; keep sentences short and correct place names and prepositions (in/near).