旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and precise: correct word choices and grammar, avoid redundancy, and use linking words to connect ideas. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences. For example, replace “standing views” with “scenic views,” change “for a memory” to “to remember the trip,” and fix verb forms (e.g., “when I'm traveling” is fine). Add a brief reason and an example using a linking word.

範例: I prefer to sit by the window when I travel, especially on planes, because I enjoy the scenic views. For example, seeing landscapes from above helps me relax and I often take photos to remember the trip.

建議: Improve grammar, tense consistency, and clarity. Use past tense for past events, remove fillers (uh), and be specific about timing and details. Structure your response with a topic sentence, a couple of supporting details (destination, who went, what you did), and a concluding remark. Use linking words like “for example” or “especially.”

範例: Yes, as a child I often went abroad with my family during summer. For example, when I was ten we travelled to Turkey with my parents and two siblings, and we visited historic sites and tried local food, which made it an unforgettable trip.

× I prefer to sit by the window when I'm traveling, especially on planes because I enjoy the standing views.

✓ I prefer to sit by the window when I'm traveling, especially on planes, because I enjoy the stunning views.

The student used 'standing views', which is not a correct adjective phrase for what they intended. The correct adjective is 'stunning' (or 'beautiful', 'breathtaking') to describe impressive views. Replace incorrect adjective with an appropriate descriptive adjective to convey meaning. Also add a comma before 'because' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× Seeing as a landscape or standards from above helps me relax and sometimes I take photos and videos for a memory.

✓ Seeing the landscape or scenery from above helps me relax, and sometimes I take photos and videos to remember it.

Multiple issues: 'Seeing as a landscape' is ungrammatical — use 'seeing the landscape' or 'seeing scenery'. 'Standards' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'scenery'. 'for a memory' is unnatural; use 'to remember it' or 'as a memory'. Also add a comma before 'and' to link the two clauses. These changes correct word choice and sentence flow while keeping present continuous/general meaning. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× When I was a child, we usually go, uh, to other country in my summer holidays and one of them is uh, a trip to a Turkey with my parents and two siblings.

✓ When I was a child, we usually went to other countries during my summer holidays, and one of those trips was to Turkey with my parents and two siblings.

The sentence mixes past context ('When I was a child') with present-tense verb 'go' and present 'is'. Use past tense 'went' and past 'was' to maintain consistent past narrative. Also correct articles and count nouns: 'other country' should be 'other countries' or 'another country', 'during my summer holidays' is more natural, and 'a trip to a Turkey' is incorrect — use 'a trip to Turkey'. These corrections address tense consistency and article/number usage. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× It was an amazing trip that I have ever had and it was when I was.

✓ It was the most amazing trip I had ever had.

The original mixes past simple 'It was' with present perfect 'I have ever had' and ends with an incomplete clause 'and it was when I was.' For a past reference, use past perfect or past simple consistently: 'the most amazing trip I had ever had' or 'the most amazing trip I have ever had' if speaking from present perspective. Also remove the incomplete fragment. Here, 'I had ever had' fits the past narrative better. This fixes tense inconsistency and incomplete sentence. Grammar problem type ID: 5