旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 用更自然且语法正确的句子直接回答问题，并减少犹豫词（如 uh）。保持句子简洁（不超过5句），并用连接词组织细节。如描述原因时可用 because/so/therefore，同时提供具体例子（例如你喜欢看什么样的景色）。注意单词搭配（sit by the window, sights not sightings, atmosphere复数用法）。

範例: Yes, I usually prefer to sit by the window when travelling, whether on a train or a plane. I enjoy watching the scenery change and find it relaxing to listen to music while looking outside. For example, on long train trips I like to watch the countryside and notice small villages and rivers passing by. This helps me feel calm and makes the journey more enjoyable.

建議: 回答要时态一致并尽量避免含糊表达。直接用过去时描述童年经历（e.g. I had a long journey）。提供具体细节（多少天、做了什么、印象深刻的地方），用连词（for example, we visited/ we stayed）使叙述连贯。同时纠正地名和人称错误（Beijing 是城市不是省份；‘Adam Sir’ 含义不明应改为具体人或导游）。

範例: Yes, I had a long trip with my family when I was a child. In 2017, when I was eleven, we spent a week in Beijing and visited places like the Forbidden City and the Great Wall. I especially remember climbing a section of the Great Wall and enjoying the city’s parks and food. That trip left a strong impression on me because it was my first time seeing such famous historical sites.

× Personally, I do prefer sit besides a window, uh, while traveling, uh, no matter on the train or on the airplane 'cause I really enjoy the atmospheres that you can just, uh, sit out there, listen to music and uh, enjoy the sightings outside of the outside of the window.

✓ Personally, I do prefer sitting beside a window while traveling, whether on the train or on an airplane, because I really enjoy the atmosphere when you can just sit there, listen to music, and enjoy the sights outside the window.

问题类型：动词+ing形式错误。句中“prefer sit”应使用动名词“prefer sitting”或不使用助动词“do”。另外“besides a window”应为“beside a window”或“beside the window”；“no matter on the train or on the airplane”结构不自然，改为“whether on the train or on an airplane”。“atmospheres”与上下文不搭，常用单数“atmosphere”；“sit out there”可改为“sit there”；“sightings outside of the outside of the window”重复且用词不当，改为“sights outside the window”。建议：在“prefer”后接动名词或使用完整结构（e.g. I prefer to sit），注意介词和单复数的搭配，避免重复。

× Yeah, I do have a long journey with my family as a child. Uh, I remember back to 2017, uh, I was like 11 years old.

✓ Yeah, I did have a long journey with my family when I was a child. I remember back in 2017; I was about 11 years old.

问题类型：过去时错误。原句“I do have a long journey... as a child”时态与时间状语不一致，应使用过去时“did have”或更自然的过去式结构“I had a long journey when I was a child”。“remember back to 2017”习惯表达为“remember back in 2017”。建议：描述过去经历时使用过去时态，注意固定搭配“remember back in…/when I was…”等。

× We went to, uh, another province in China is Beijing is very beautiful there and, uh, Adam Sir is very nice and we spent like a week there.

✓ We went to another province in China. Beijing is very beautiful, and the people there are very nice, and we spent about a week there.

问题类型：介词和句子结构使用不当。原句“went to another province in China is Beijing”语序混乱，应将地名和描述分成两句或用从句；“Adam Sir”显然是错误或听写问题，若指人应改为“the people there”或具体人名；“spent like a week”口语可用“spent about a week”。建议：保持句子结构清晰，地点和描述分句表达，使用正确的代词或名词，避免口语填充词干扰。