旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct basic grammar and word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "Yes, I prefer a window seat."), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct repeated words and wrong verbs ("sit the window" → "sit by the window", "ship" → "sit by"). Limit response to 3–4 sentences and vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., "scenery", "photograph", "relax").

範例: Yes, I prefer a window seat. I enjoy looking at the scenery and often take photos and videos during the trip. Also, I find it more relaxing and private, so I can rest or enjoy the view without disturbance.

建議: Improve grammar, clarity and provide specific details. Use a clear topic sentence (e.g., "Yes, I had a very long journey with my family when I was a child.") then give specific facts (duration, destination), feelings, and a brief reason why it was memorable. Use linking words like "because" or "which". Avoid vague phrases like "more experience" and correct article use ("an experience" → "a long journey").

範例: Yes, I had a very long journey with my family when I was a child; it lasted about ten hours because we were flying to visit relatives abroad. I loved the flight because it was my first time on a plane and I remember watching clouds and taking pictures. That trip stands out in my memory because it was exciting and different from my everyday life.

× Yes, usually when I travel I sit the window because I I love the scenery when I travel also I take picture and take video and I feel comfortable when I ship the window.

✓ Yes, usually when I travel I sit by the window because I love the scenery. I also take pictures and videos and I feel comfortable sitting by the window.

Errors: incorrect preposition 'sit the window' and 'ship the window' should be 'sit by the window' and 'sitting by the window' (preposition and gerund). Also 'take picture and take video' needs plural nouns 'pictures' and 'videos' (singular/plural). Remove duplicated 'I'. Suggestions: use 'sit by the window' for location, use gerund 'sitting' after 'feel comfortable', use plural forms for countable nouns and eliminate repeated words.

× Yes, usually when I travel I sit the window because I I love the scenery when I travel also I take picture and take video and I feel comfortable when I ship the window. So I really like comfortable and easy and enjoy the window.

✓ Yes, usually when I travel I sit by the window because I love the scenery. I also take pictures and videos and I feel comfortable sitting by the window. So I really like it because it is comfortable and relaxing.

Errors: 'take picture' and 'take video' should be plural 'take pictures' and 'take videos' for general activities (singular/plural issue). 'So I really like comfortable and easy' is incorrect adjective use and missing pronoun/object. Suggestions: use plural nouns for habitual actions and include pronoun 'it' and appropriate adjectives 'comfortable and relaxing'.

× Yes I have a experience long journey with my family when I was a child, minimum 10 hours.

✓ Yes, I had a long travel experience with my family when I was a child; it lasted at least 10 hours.

Errors: 'I have a experience' uses incorrect article and tense and pronoun structure; should be 'I had' for past event, and 'an experience' not 'a experience'. Also 'minimum 10 hours' is informal; use 'at least 10 hours'. Suggestions: use past tense for past events, correct article 'an' before vowel sound, and clearer time expression.

× I travel with my family in the sky so I really love it.

✓ I traveled with my family by plane so I really loved it.

Errors: 'I travel' is present tense but referring to past event; should be past 'I traveled'. 'in the sky' is unnatural; use 'by plane'. 'I really love it' should match past perspective 'I really loved it'. Suggestions: match verb tense to time frame and use natural collocations ('by plane').

× It's a more experience in my life.

✓ It was a memorable experience in my life.

Errors: 'It's a more experience' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use adjective 'memorable' or 'important' and correct tense 'was' for past. Suggestions: choose appropriate adjective and correct verb to form a clear sentence.

× I always remember the this day I travel.

✓ I always remember the day I traveled.

Errors: extra article 'the' before 'this' ('the this day') is incorrect and tense mismatch 'I travel' should be past 'I traveled'. Suggestions: remove redundant words and use past tense for past events; say 'the day I traveled' or 'that day'.