旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 用更自然、简洁的句子直接回答问题，减少重复和填充词（如“uh”）。先给出主题句，然后用一到两句提供具体原因与例子，使用连接词使语流更顺畅。可改进发音与语法（例如："nearby the windows" 应为 "near the window"）。

範例: Yes, I usually choose a window seat when I travel by plane or high-speed train because it helps me relax and enjoy the scenery. For example, on a recent train trip I spent hours watching the countryside, which made the journey much more pleasant.

建議: 回答要更具体并注意时态与语法（如“as I was a students study” 应为“when I was in junior school”）。先直接回答，然后用具体细节说明时间、目的地或活动，使用连接词解释影响或结果，避免泛泛而谈。

範例: Yes, when I was in junior school my parents and I took a long trip to the countryside. We visited small villages and historical sites, which opened my eyes to different ways of life and helped me become more curious about the world.

× Yes, I always choose the seat nearby the windows, uh, when traveling by plane or high speed train

✓ Yes, I always choose the seat near the window when traveling by plane or high-speed train.

句中“nearby the windows”不符合英语介词和名词搭配。应使用介词短语“near the window”或“by the window”，并且“window”在此处指一个位置用单数更自然；“high speed train”应连字符构成复合形容词“high-speed train”。建议多记介词短语搭配（near/by + the + 单数位置名词）并注意复合形容词的连字符用法。

× Uh, because during my journey I think sit, sit nearby the window can make me relax my mood and uh, see the beautiful scenery.

✓ Because during my journey I think sitting near the window can help me relax and see the beautiful scenery.

原句时态和动词形式混乱。表达“我认为……能让我……”要用动名词作主语，从句结构为“I think + -ing... can...”。因此将“sit, sit nearby the window”改为“sitting near the window”；“make me relax my mood”不自然，改为“help me relax”。另外使用“see the beautiful scenery”更通顺。建议学习think后面常接从句或动名词结构，以及动名词作主语的用法。

× Yes, I had a long journey with my parents as I was a students study at Junior School.

✓ Yes, I had a long journey with my parents when I was a student studying at junior school.

句中时态需要过去式，原句有多处错误："as I was a students"中“students”为复数，应为单数“student”；“study at Junior School”需改为进行式或过去进行时的分词短语“studying at junior school”来修饰主语的状态；“as”可以换为更自然的“when”。建议注意名词单复数一致以及用现在分词作定语或时间状语修饰过去的情况。

× We enjoy a wonderful journey together and it makes me broaden my horizon and improve myself.

✓ We enjoyed a wonderful journey together, and it helped me broaden my horizons and improve myself.

句子描述的是过去经历，应使用过去时态："enjoy"改为"enjoyed"；"it makes me broaden my horizon"中时态不一致且“horizon”常用复数“horizons”表示视野拓宽，改为"it helped me broaden my horizons"更自然。建议统一句子时态，注意主语与动词时态一致，以及常用短语（broaden one's horizons）。