旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, correct grammar, avoid repetition and add a linking phrase. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Also correct verb forms and word order (e.g., “when I travel,” “it gives”).

範例: Yes, I usually prefer the window seat when I travel because it offers a nice view. For example, I enjoy watching landscapes pass by, and sometimes feeling fresh air at stops makes the journey more pleasant.

建議: Clarify tense and avoid vague phrasing. Begin with a direct answer (Yes/No), then use correct past tense and add a specific detail (when, how long, purpose). Use linking words like “because” or “to” to connect ideas. Correct phrases: “I traveled with my parents,” “we went to Chennai,” “to visit my cousin’s house.”

範例: Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was a child. We travelled by car to Chennai, India, which took about eight hours, because we went to visit my cousin’s house for a family reunion.

× Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I traveling because it's a great it's a great view from the outside.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because it gives a great view outside.

Error type: Present tense issue. The verb form 'traveling' after 'when I' should be base form 'travel' in a simple present time clause. Also redundant phrase 'it's a great it's a great' should be reduced and 'it's gives' is incorrect subject-verb form; use 'it gives'. Suggestion: use 'when I travel' and 'it gives a great view outside' for grammatical simple present tense consistency and clarity.

× It's gives a great view from the outside and you can feel the air it.

✓ It gives a great view from the outside and you can feel the air.

Error type: Incorrect use of pronouns. The clause ends with an unnecessary pronoun 'it' after 'air', creating an extra object. Also 'It's gives' combines contraction 'it is' with a verb incorrectly; use 'It gives'. Suggestion: remove the extra 'it' and use 'It gives' to form correct subject-verb structure.

× Yeah, I haven't learned any with my parents when I was a child.

✓ Yeah, I didn't travel with my parents when I was a child.

Error type: Present tense issue (and incorrect verb choice). 'I haven't learned any' is incorrect and mixes present perfect with past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use simple past 'didn't travel' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: use 'I didn't travel with my parents when I was a child.'

× We go to Chennai, India.

✓ We went to Chennai, India.

Error type: Present tense issue. The speaker refers to a past journey, so use simple past 'went' instead of present 'go'. Suggestion: use past tense verbs when talking about completed actions in the past.

× We go there to visit our cousin house.

✓ We went there to visit our cousin's house.

Error type: Incorrect use of prepositions and possessive form. Use the possessive 'cousin's house' to show ownership and change verb to past 'went' to match past context. Also 'visit our cousin house' is missing the possessive. Suggestion: write 'visit our cousin's house.'