旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally natural and relevant, but it is a bit long and slightly repetitive (mentioning memories twice). To improve, start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Reduce redundancy and correct minor phrasing (e.g., 'I force myself' instead of 'I forced myself' for habitual situations).

範例: I usually avoid looking out of the window because I get motion sickness. However, when we pass particularly beautiful places, I force myself to look briefly and take photos to preserve memories. For example, I often snap quick shots of interesting architecture or dramatic landscapes so I can share them later.

建議: This answer is relevant and offers specific details about photography, but there are small grammar and word-choice issues ('earlier' could be 'as I said earlier', 'turned to look' should be 'turn to look', and 'lightning' should be 'lighting'). Keep it concise and use a linking word to connect reasons and examples.

範例: As I said earlier, I only turn to look out of the window to take photographs. Photos help me preserve memories to share with friends and family, and I enjoy experimenting with different angles and lighting to make cityscapes and sunsets more striking. For instance, I often tilt the camera slightly to capture reflections on wet streets.

建議: This is a strong response: clear topic sentence, reasons, and a vivid example. To improve further, tighten phrasing (avoid small redundancies like 'beautiful scenery of the mountains' and 'the views are amazing') and use one linking phrase to connect reasons and the example. Keep within 3–4 sentences for conciseness.

範例: I like both, but if I had to choose I would pick the mountains because I enjoy hiking in the fresh air and feeling safe there. Moreover, the scenery is peaceful and rewarding; for example, I often hike to a viewpoint at sunrise to watch the light spread over the valleys, which is truly spectacular.

× Not really, I usually avoid looking out of the window because I get motion sickness.

✓ Not really, I usually avoid looking out of windows because I get motion sickness.

The definite article 'the' implies a specific window; here the speaker means windows in general when travelling, so the plural without 'the' or with no article ('looking out of windows') is appropriate. Use plural to match general statement.

× This is because photos help me preserve memories to share with my friends and families.

✓ This is because photos help me preserve memories to share with my friends and family.

'Friends and family' is the common collocation; 'family' as a collective noun does not usually take a plural when referring to members generally. Using 'families' implies multiple distinct families, which is unlikely here.

× I also enjoy experimenting with different angles and lightning to make cityscapes and sunsets more interesting.

✓ I also enjoy experimenting with different angles and lighting to make cityscapes and sunsets more interesting.

'Lightning' refers to electrical discharge (thunder), while 'lighting' refers to illumination used in photography. This is a wrong word choice (adjective/noun misuse). Replace with 'lighting' to convey correct meaning.

× As I earlier said, taking photographs is the only reason why I turned to look out of the window when traveling.

✓ As I said earlier, taking photographs is the only reason why I look out of the window when traveling.

Tense inconsistency: 'As I earlier said' is better phrased 'As I said earlier'. The sentence mixes past ('turned') with a general habit; use present simple 'look out' to match general truth about current behaviour. Also 'earlier' placement is more natural after 'said'.

× ...I forced myself to peer outside briefly and take a few snapshots because I'm big on memories.

✓ ...I force myself to peer outside briefly and take a few snapshots because I'm big on memories.

Context indicates habitual action on some journeys, so present simple 'force' fits better than past 'forced'. This error also relates to tense but primarily fixes article/word consistency; switching to present simple clarifies general tendency. Note: if referring to a single past journey, past tense would be acceptable, but surrounding context shows habitual behaviour.

× I love keeping memories.

✓ I love preserving memories.

'Keeping memories' is an unnatural collocation in English; 'preserving memories' or 'keeping mementos' are idiomatic. This corrects lexical choice and aligns with present-tense habit.

× Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?

✓ Do you look out of the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?

The phrasal verb is 'look out of (the) window' or 'look out the window' in some dialects; to be precise, 'look out of the window' or drop 'of' completely but keep consistent. The original question used 'look out the window' elsewhere; here adding 'of' makes it consistent and idiomatic. Either 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window' is acceptable; choose one and use consistently.

× But if I had to choose, I would pick the mountains because I feel safer there and I love hiking in the fresh air.

✓ But if I had to choose, I would pick the mountains because I feel safer there and I love hiking in the fresh air.

No grammatical correction needed; sentence is correct. Included here to indicate no change required for conditional/future structure. (No error.)

× The views are amazing and very peaceful, and I especially enjoy walking to a viewpoint at the sunrise when the landscape looks spectacular.

✓ The views are amazing and very peaceful, and I especially enjoy walking to a viewpoint at sunrise when the landscape looks spectacular.

Article error: 'at the sunrise' is unidiomatic; use 'at sunrise' (no article) when referring to sunrise as a time. This fixes preposition/article usage and keeps present-tense habitual meaning.