旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Good direct response with a clear topic sentence and a supporting example. To improve, shorten slightly to avoid redundancy, add one linking phrase to connect reason and example, and use a small increase in precision (e.g., ‘tree-lined roads’). Keep answers under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because peaceful landscapes help me relax. For example, I enjoy watching tree-lined roads and distant hills pass by, which helps me unwind and reflect.

建議: The answer repeats and contains unclear word choice (‘celiac’) and filler sounds. Improve by giving one clear topic sentence, remove repetitions and fillers, replace the unclear word with a precise phrase (e.g., ‘beautiful scenes’), and add a brief reason or purpose. Limit to two or three sentences.

範例: Yes, I often take pictures of the scenery outside the car window because I want to capture beautiful moments. I usually photograph interesting landscapes and people to keep the memories.

建議: Clear answer and comparison, but contains small grammar errors and slightly awkward phrasing. Improve by using correct verb agreement, smoother linking words, and more specific details about why each is preferable. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

範例: I prefer both, because the mountains calm me and help me think clearly, while the sea boosts my energy and lifts my mood when I look at the waves.

× Yes, I love looking out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I find peaceful landscapes very relaxing.

✓ Yes, I love looking out the window when I travel by bus or by car because I find peaceful landscapes very relaxing.

The original sentence used 'by bus or car'. To be parallel and idiomatic in English, use the same preposition for both items: 'by bus or by car' or 'by bus or car' is acceptable, but 'out of the window' is less common than 'out the window'. I corrected to 'out the window' and made prepositions parallel to improve naturalness and consistency. Suggestion: Use parallel prepositions for coordinated phrases and prefer 'look out the window' in spoken English.

× Yes, I have a habit of taking celiac scenery views, umm, I have a habit of taking pictures of the scenery views and umm the photographic moments as well as I like to keep it safe.

✓ Yes, I have a habit of taking pictures of the scenery and photographic moments; I like to keep them safe.

The phrase 'celiac scenery views' is incorrect: 'celiac' is unrelated (medical) and inappropriate. 'Scenery views' is redundant; 'scenery' or 'views' alone suffices. The sentence was also repetitive and lacked correct pronoun reference: 'keep it safe' should refer to 'pictures', so use 'them'. I removed filler words and combined ideas for clarity. Suggestion: Use precise nouns ('scenery', 'pictures') and ensure pronouns match their antecedents in number and meaning.

× I prefer both mountains and the sea. Mountains gives me calm and refreshes my mind, while sea improves my energy levels and I quite enjoy looking at the water it gives.

✓ I prefer both the mountains and the sea. Mountains give me calm and refresh my mind, while the sea boosts my energy levels, and I quite enjoy looking at the water.

There are several issues: 'Mountains gives' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; plural 'mountains' requires 'give'. 'Sea improves my energy levels' is acceptable but 'the sea' is more natural. The clause 'looking at the water it gives' is ungrammatical and unclear; 'looking at the water' avoids the unclear pronoun 'it'. I also added 'the' before 'mountains' and 'sea' for naturalness. Suggestion: Ensure verbs agree with subjects (plural subject -> plural verb). Use definite article 'the' with geographical features when speaking generally, and avoid unclear pronouns.