旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 発言が断片的で「uh」「you know」が多く、不明瞭な表現や文法ミスが目立ちます。まずは主題文を明確にして（Yes/No＋短い理由）、支持情報を2文以内で具体的に述べる練習をしてください。結びの一文で習慣や頻度を示すと自然です。不要なフィラーを減らし、文法（現在形、動名詞/進行形）を整えることを意識してください。

範例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy observing the surroundings. For example, I like watching natural landscapes, local festivals and people going about their day. I usually do this throughout the journey to relax and stay entertained.

建議: 理由は分かりやすいですが表現が繰り返しで文が途中で終わっています。論理の流れを整理し、接続詞を使って理由と結果をはっきり示してください。また、曖昧な語（maybe）や繰り返しを避け、過去や習慣を示す語を正確に使いましょう。

範例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside because I might never see the view again. Therefore, I take pictures to preserve the memory and show them to my friends later.

建議: 主張は明確ですが文法や語順が不自然で、語の選び方（air that's so clear）や文の完結が問題です。理由を2点までに絞り、比較表現や感情表現を自然な語彙で述べ、文をきちんと完結させる練習をしてください。

範例: I prefer the mountains because the views from the top are spectacular and the air is much fresher than in the city. This peaceful environment helps me relax and clear my mind.

× I always watching outside and Oh yeah.

✓ I am always watching outside.

The sentence omits the auxiliary verb 'am' required with the present continuous tense (subject 'I' + be + verb-ing). Use 'I am always watching outside' to form a correct present continuous. Suggestion: include the appropriate form of 'be' (am/is/are) before the -ing verb when describing ongoing actions.

× I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside because maybe I cannot see one more time.

✓ I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside because I may not see it again.

The phrase 'one more time' is unnatural for referring to the scenery; 'it again' correctly references 'the scenery' using the pronoun 'it'. Also replace 'maybe I cannot' with 'I may not' for natural modal use. Suggestion: use 'it' for singular inanimate nouns and use 'again' to indicate repetition.

× So I want to keep this, uh, landscape.

✓ So I want to keep this landscape in my memory.

The verb 'keep' needs an object or complement; 'keep this landscape' is incomplete in meaning. Adding 'in my memory' clarifies the intent of preserving the scene. Suggestion: complete the thought by specifying how you will 'keep' something (e.g., 'keep it in my memory' or 'keep a photo of it').

× So I want to take pictures and.

✓ So I want to take pictures.

The sentence ends with a conjunction 'and' without a following clause, creating an incomplete sentence. Remove the trailing 'and' to complete the sentence or add the missing clause. Suggestion: avoid hanging conjunctions; finish the thought.

× I prefer the mountain because it is very beautiful from top of mountain and also, uh, air that's so clear.

✓ I prefer the mountains because they are very beautiful from the top, and the air is so clear.

Use plural 'mountains' when speaking generally about mountains. Subject-verb agreement requires 'they are' for plural. Also add articles 'the' for 'top' and 'the air'. Suggestion: use plural for general preferences and include definite articles where needed.

× So it makes my heart, uh, calm down.

✓ So it calms my heart down.

The original word order 'makes my heart calm down' is grammatically possible but less natural; 'it calms my heart down' is more idiomatic. Alternatively, 'it calms me down' is simplest. Suggestion: prefer common collocations like 'calms me down' or 'calms my heart'.

× I like, uh, watching a lot of things, you know, for example, a nature's, uh, character thing, you know, uh, festivals and umm, well, yeah, people doing so yeah, I always watching outside and Oh yeah.

✓ I like watching many things, for example nature, festivals, and people doing activities; I am always looking outside.

Multiple issues: 'a nature's, uh, character thing' is ungrammatical—use 'nature' without possessive; 'a lot of things' is fine but 'many things' is clearer; 'people doing so' is vague—'people doing activities' is clearer. Also 'I always watching' needs auxiliary 'am'. Suggestion: simplify and use correct noun forms and present continuous with 'am/is/are'.

× Because maybe I cannot see one more time.

✓ Because I might not see it again.

'Maybe I cannot' is awkward; use modal 'might' or 'may' with the base verb for probability. 'One more time' is less natural than 'again'. Also use 'it' to refer to scenery. Suggestion: use 'might not' or 'may not' + base verb and 'again' for repetition.