旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (e.g., “lookout” → “look out”, “taking picture” → “taking pictures”). Tone down expressions like “make people jealous” which sound awkward; instead say “share experiences.”

範例: I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because the scenery relaxes me. For example, watching trees and rivers helps me forget daily worries, and I often take photos to share the peaceful view on social media.

建議: Improve grammar and coherence by using linking words and correct verb forms (e.g., “I always take photos,” “when I’m hiking”). Combine similar ideas to avoid repetition and provide a concrete example to support your answer.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I like the atmosphere. For instance, when I go hiking in the mountains I always take pictures on the way to the summit to capture the views and then post them online.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and follow with specific reasons using correct grammar. Avoid vague phrases and awkward constructions (e.g., “it's helped me” → “they help me,” “makes my life peacefully” → “make me feel peaceful”). Add one specific detail or brief example to strengthen your response.

範例: I prefer the mountains because they help me relax and forget my problems. For example, hiking in the mountains clears my mind and reminds me to accept life’s difficulties calmly.

× Yes, I love lookout to the window when the scenery when traveling by bus or car.

✓ Yes, I love looking out of the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car.

The phrase 'lookout' is incorrect; the correct form is the verb 'look' with the -ing form 'looking' (Grammar Problem Type 8: Verb + -ing form). Also 'out the window' needs preposition 'out of' and placement of 'at the scenery' after 'window' to be natural. Suggestion: use 'looking out of the window at the scenery'. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× It helps me forget my problem and it makes my life peacefully.

✓ It helps me forget my problems and makes my life peaceful.

'Problem' should be plural as a general statement about worries (Grammar Problem Type 1: Singular and plural issue). 'Peacefully' is an adverb but a noun 'life' needs adjective 'peaceful' (Grammar Problem Type 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Combine corrections: 'forget my problems' and 'life peaceful'. Grammar problem type ID: 1 and 13

× Also, I love picture.

✓ Also, I love pictures.

'Picture' as a general hobby should be plural 'pictures' or use 'photography'. This is a singular/plural issue (Grammar Problem Type 1) and word choice; better: 'I love taking pictures' or 'I love photography'. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× I love taking picture and that because I love posting on social media and I want to make people jealous because my love, my life, my life is peaceful.

✓ I love taking pictures because I enjoy posting them on social media; I want to show that my life is peaceful.

Multiple issues: 'picture' should be plural (Grammar Problem Type 1), 'that because' is ungrammatical—use 'because' to connect clauses (Grammar Problem Type 26: Sentence structure errors), and repetition 'my love, my life, my life' is redundant. Also 'make people jealous' is informal and awkward; better 'show that my life is peaceful'. Suggest restructuring into a single coherent sentence. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Yes, I always take photos of the scenery outside the car of the window because you know, I love the vibe.

✓ Yes, I always take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I love the vibe.

'Outside the car of the window' has incorrect preposition order; use 'outside the car window' or 'out of the car window' (Grammar Problem Type 11). Also remove filler 'you know' in formal answer. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× I love to post it. I want to show to the other people what I see.

✓ I love to post them. I want to show other people what I see.

'It' should agree with plural 'photos' -> 'them' (Grammar Problem Type 12). Also 'show to the other people' should be 'show other people' (preposition unnecessary). Grammar problem type ID: 12

× I want to share that view.

✓ I want to share that view.

This sentence is correct; no change needed. (No grammar problem matched from the list.) Grammar problem type ID: 0

× And I love when I am going to the mountain and when I'm hiking, I always taking pictures when I'm going to the top of the mountain.

✓ And I love when I go to the mountains; when I'm hiking, I always take pictures as I reach the top.

Use simple present for habitual action 'I go' rather than 'I am going' (Grammar Problem Type 6: Present tense issue). 'I always taking' is missing auxiliary 'am' or should be 'I always take' — this is verb -ing misuse and subject-verb agreement (Grammar Problem Type 8 and 27). Also 'the mountain' vs plural 'mountains' for general preference. Suggest: 'when I go to the mountains... I always take pictures when I reach the top.' Grammar problem type ID: 6 and 8 and 27

× I prefer mountains because it's helped me to forget my problem and makes my life peacefully.

✓ I prefer the mountains because they help me forget my problems and make my life peaceful.

'It's helped' mixes singular contraction 'it' with plural 'mountains' and wrong tense; should be present simple 'they help' (Grammar Problem Type 12 and 6). 'Problem' should be plural and 'peacefully' should be adjective 'peaceful' (Grammar Problem Type 1 and 13). Also include definite article 'the mountains' for general reference (Grammar Problem Type 17). Grammar problem type ID: 12 and 6 and 1 and 13 and 17

× When I'm going to the mountains, I always realize that life is not easy and just take that.

✓ When I go to the mountains, I always realize that life is not easy and I just accept that.

Use simple present 'I go' for habitual action (Grammar Problem Type 6). 'just take that' is incorrect phrasing; use 'accept that' to convey meaning (Grammar Problem Type 26). Also add subject 'I' before 'just accept'. Grammar problem type ID: 26 and 6}]}