旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Keep answers concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use linking words for clarity. Be specific: mention a brief example and one or two observations rather than repeating words. Practice correct collocations (look out of the window, nature lover) and remove filler words.

範例: Yes, I often look out of the window when travelling by bus or car because I enjoy watching the landscape. For example, on long trips I like to observe the countryside and count different types of trees, which helps me relax.

建議: Be natural and avoid hesitations and awkward word choices. Give a direct answer first (Yes/No), then a short reason and a specific example. Use correct phrases (not a photography addict, take photos of the scenery) and remove fillers like 'uh'. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Not really; I'm not a photography addict, but sometimes I take photos of the scenery to remember a peaceful place. For instance, I took pictures of a riverside view last month so I can look back and feel relaxed.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence then support it with 1–2 specific reasons and a brief example. Correct minor grammar (natural surroundings, enjoy being on the beach). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to connect ideas.

範例: I prefer the sea because the air is fresh and the surroundings help me relax. For example, I like sitting on the beach listening to the waves and some calm music on my phone, which clears my mind.

× I really like looking outside at from the window on the when traveling by bus or car because I'm a natural natural lover and I like to enjoy the nature peacefully.

✓ I really like looking out from the window when traveling by bus or car because I'm a nature lover and I like to enjoy nature peacefully.

Errors: extra or wrong prepositions ('outside at from', 'on the when') and article/adjective misuse ('a natural natural lover', 'the nature'). Correction: use the correct phrasal verb 'look out from the window' or simply 'look out the window' and remove redundant prepositions; use 'when traveling' for time clause. Use 'a nature lover' (noun phrase) and uncountable 'nature' without 'the'. Suggestion: simplify phrases and avoid stacking prepositions; check collocations like 'look out (the) window' and 'nature lover'.

× For instance, on a long trip, I I often watch the count, watch the countryside and count different types of trees.

✓ For instance, on a long trip, I often watch the countryside and count different types of trees.

Errors: repetition ('I I'), awkward phrase 'watch the count'. Correction: remove duplicate word and the unclear phrase; 'watch the countryside' is acceptable and 'count different types of trees' is clear. Suggestion: avoid repetitions and use clear verbs; if you meant 'count livestock' or 'count houses' specify the object.

× I'm not a photo addictive person, but sometimes I would like to take the photo of the scenario, uh, which will give me uh, relaxation in the future where I can go and enjoy again with the nature and the scenario of the environment, help me to keep me peaceful.

✓ I'm not someone addicted to taking photos, but sometimes I like to take a photo of the scenery, which gives me relaxation and lets me enjoy nature again; the scenery helps me feel peaceful.

Errors: incorrect adjective/adverb forms ('photo addictive person'), wrong noun ('scenario' should be 'scenery'), awkward phrasing and redundancy ('help me to keep me peaceful'). Correction: use 'someone addicted to taking photos' or 'not a photo addict', use 'scenery' for landscape, simplify tense to present 'gives' for general truth, and remove redundant pronouns. Suggestion: use correct adjective/noun forms and concise clauses; avoid filler sounds like 'uh'.

× I prefer the sea because the air is fresh and the natural surrounding helps me relax.

✓ I prefer the sea because the air is fresh and the natural surroundings help me relax.

Errors: 'surrounding' should be plural noun 'surroundings' and subject-verb agreement with plural subject requires 'help' not 'helps'. Correction: use 'surroundings' and 'help'. Suggestion: remember common collocation 'natural surroundings' and agree verb with subject number.

× I enjoy on the beach and listening to the waves and the music on the phone, which makes me feel so peaceful and clears my mind.

✓ I enjoy being on the beach, listening to the waves and to music on my phone, which makes me feel peaceful and clears my mind.

Errors: incorrect use of verb 'enjoy on the beach' (need gerund 'being' or 'spending time'), unnecessary article 'the music' and awkward 'on the phone'. Correction: 'being on the beach' or 'spending time on the beach'; 'listening to the waves and to music on my phone' clarifies sources. Suggestion: use gerunds after 'enjoy' when referring to activities, and specify possessions with 'my' for clarity.