旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct tense/word choice errors (e.g., 'capture my eyes' → 'catch my eye', 'when I saw it' → 'when I see it').

範例: Yes, I always look out the window when I travel by bus or car because the views often catch my eye. For example, I enjoy watching rolling hills and small villages pass by, which I find calming and a pleasant way to pass the time.

建議: Be clear and avoid contradictory or incorrect phrases. Give one main point (you take photos) and a reason with a specific example. Remove unclear words like 'nasty memory' and replace with 'lasting memory'. Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of scenery from the car because I like to share them with family and friends. For instance, I recently photographed a dramatic sunset over the hills and sent the best shots to my sister so we could remember the trip together.

建議: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence naming your preference, then give one or two specific reasons using correct grammar. Avoid repetition and mixed images (rivers vs seaside). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

範例: I prefer the sea because it gives me a sense of peace and helps me relax. For example, listening to the waves and watching the horizon calms my mind after a busy week.

× Yes, I always look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car because the breathtaking landscapes always capture my eyes and it's relaxing when I saw it and I really.

✓ Yes, I always look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car because the breathtaking landscapes always catch my eye and it is relaxing to see them.

Mixing past tense 'saw' with present simple 'always look' creates inconsistent tense. Also 'capture my eyes' is unnatural; use 'catch my eye'. Use 'it is relaxing to see them' to express the general present feeling. Suggestion: keep present simple throughout for habitual actions and use idiomatic verbs and plural agreement for 'landscapes' -> 'them'.

× Absolutely, I always take photos of the breathtaking landscapes and I enjoy sharing them with my family and friends and beside the scenery, always capturing my eyes and I want to make a nasty memory.

✓ Absolutely, I always take photos of the breathtaking landscapes, and I enjoy sharing them with my family and friends. Besides the scenery, which always catches my eye, I want to create a nice memory.

Sentence is run-on and contains wrong participle phrase 'always capturing my eyes' and incorrect adjective 'nasty memory'. Use 'which always catches my eye' to form a relative clause and 'create a nice memory' for correct collocation. Break into two sentences for clarity and correct participle use.

× I prefer the sea because it the sea helps me give me a sense of peace and extremely relaxing and looking at the the rivers, looking at the seaside always helps me in feel.

✓ I prefer the sea because it gives me a sense of peace and is extremely relaxing. Looking at the seaside always helps me to relax.

Redundant and incorrect article use ('the sea' repeated) and awkward structure 'helps me give me'. Correct with simple subject-verb 'it gives me' and use 'is extremely relaxing'. Remove duplicate 'the' and use infinitive 'helps me to relax' for natural expression.