旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Сформулируйте короткое и логичное вступление, избегайте лишних слов и повторов. Используйте связку для объяснения причины и приведите конкретный пример. Например, начните с ясного утверждения, затем добавьте причину и один краткий пример. Также исправьте неверное использование слова "itineraries" и повторяющиеся слова.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when travelling by bus. I find the changing scenery makes long journeys feel shorter, because watching towns and countryside keeps me entertained. For example, I often spot small farms and people working in fields, which makes the trip more interesting.

建議: Уберите междометия и заполнители («umm», «uh») и сформулируйте мысль яснее, приведя конкретную причину и пример. Используйте связки (because, so, for example) и корректную форму существительного (scenery — неисчисляемое).

範例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it looks natural and beautiful. For example, I like to capture fields at sunset or interesting buildings, so I can remember the view later.

建議: Уберите заполнители и постройте ответ из 2–3 связных предложений: чёткое утверждение, причина и пример. Уточните формулировки («provide us with fresh air», «wildlife») и используйте связки (because, so, for example).

範例: I prefer the mountains because they are peaceful and offer fresh air where I can relax after a busy day. For example, I enjoy walking among trees and wildflowers and spotting wildlife, which helps me unwind.

× I always look out the window itineraries when I am traveling by bus and I think it's it reduces long journeys and the journeys becomes become more interesting and it it's not big.

✓ I always look out of the window at the scenery when I am travelling by bus because it makes long journeys more interesting and less boring.

The sentence contains multiple issues, but those that match the provided list include incorrect use of the present participle and verb forms and related structure: 'it reduces long journeys' and 'the journeys becomes become more interesting' use incorrect verb forms and agreement. Correct phrasing uses 'makes' (present simple) with singular subject 'it', not 'reduces', and 'more interesting' without extra auxiliary verbs. Also 'look out the window itineraries' is incorrect collocation; use 'look out of the window at the scenery'. Suggestions: use correct collocations ('look out of the window', 'at the scenery'), ensure subject-verb agreement ('it makes'), remove redundant words ('become become', 'it's it'), and use simple present for habitual actions.

× I usually take photos of sceneries outside the car window because they are natural and beautiful and I think every minute umm is uh truly uh, hard to find in anytime and.

✓ I usually take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it is natural and beautiful, and I think every minute is truly hard to find at any time.

Errors related to noun form and verb use: 'sceneries' is incorrect in this context; use the uncountable noun 'scenery'. 'they are natural and beautiful' should agree with 'scenery' as singular ('it is natural and beautiful'). The phrase 'every minute... is truly hard to find in anytime' is ungrammatical; correct to 'every minute is truly hard to find at any time' or better 'every minute is precious and hard to find'. Suggestions: use uncountable nouns correctly, match pronouns to noun number, and use standard prepositional phrase 'at any time'.

× I prefer, uh, mountains, uh, mostly because they are high and they provide us fresh air there, uh, where I can relax after a busy day.

✓ I prefer mountains mostly because they are high and provide us with fresh air, where I can relax after a busy day.

The original contains minor issues: 'provide us fresh air' needs the preposition 'with' ('provide us with fresh air') and extra commas and fillers disrupt flow. This is a singular/plural and preposition issue: 'mountains... provide' is correct plural agreement, but the sentence needed 'with'. Suggestions: include the preposition 'with' after 'provide', remove unnecessary fillers, and keep sentence structure concise.

× And mountains have natural environment with flowers, trees and with, uh, wild.

✓ Mountains have a natural environment with flowers, trees and wildlife.

Errors involve incorrect noun choice and missing article: 'natural environment' needs the indefinite article 'a' ('have a natural environment'), and 'wild' is the wrong word; use 'wildlife'. This is an adjective/noun usage issue. Suggestions: use correct collocations ('a natural environment') and correct noun forms ('wildlife').