旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), and use correct verb forms and punctuation. Add one or two specific details using linking words to make the answer coherent (for example: “For example,” “Also,”).

範例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by car, especially on long journeys. It relaxes me and gives me peace of mind because I enjoy watching trees, different shops and people walking on the pavement. For example, I like spotting small cafés and street markets that tell me about the local life.

建議: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Use present-tense consistently, avoid repetitions and fillers, and organise the answer with a clear topic sentence plus supporting detail and an example. Use linking words like 'sometimes' and 'sometimes also' correctly.

範例: I don’t always take photos, but sometimes I do. For example, I often photograph dramatic skies or rainy streets, and occasionally I record short videos to capture the atmosphere. These clips help me remember special moments from trips.

建議: Use a clear topic sentence and correct grammar. Make sentences concise and avoid repetition. Add one specific reason or example and use linking words such as 'because' or 'for example' to explain your preference.

範例: I prefer the sea because it helps me relax and reduce stress after a busy day. For example, when my husband and I visit the coast we sit by the water and listen to the waves, which makes me feel refreshed and calm.

× Yes, I often look out the window while traveling by my car, especially when I'm on a long journey.

✓ Yes, I often look out the window while traveling in my car, especially when I'm on a long journey.

The preposition 'by' is incorrect with 'car' here; use 'in' to indicate being inside a vehicle. This is a present tense context, so use 'traveling in my car' to match subject and situation.

× It not only relaxes me but give me such Peace of Mind, uh, by looking at the trees, streets, what kind of shops on the streets and the people who were walking on the footpath.

✓ It not only relaxes me but gives me such peace of mind by looking at the trees, the streets, the shops on the streets, and the people walking on the footpath.

Compound verb with singular subject 'It' requires 'gives' (third person singular). Also articles and capitalization were inconsistent: use lowercase 'peace of mind' and add 'the' before listed nouns for clarity. Remove 'were' because present continuous context calls for 'walking' (present participle) to describe ongoing action.

× Not all the ways, but sometimes I take photos of the scene outside my car, sometimes I captured the sky and sometimes it could be rain and I used to, I used to record videos of myself and the surrounding atmosphere.

✓ Not always, but sometimes I take photos of the scene outside my car; sometimes I capture the sky, and sometimes it rains. I also used to record videos of myself and the surrounding atmosphere.

Use 'Not always' instead of 'Not all the ways'. Maintain consistent tense: present simple 'take' and 'capture' for habitual actions, 'rains' for weather. Use 'used to' once to indicate past habitual action; change 'could be rain' to 'it rains' for clarity. Punctuation improves readability.

× It really, uh, enjoyed.

✓ I really enjoy it.

Original mixes past form 'enjoyed' with unclear subject; in context the speaker expresses present feeling, so use present simple 'I really enjoy it' with explicit subject 'I'.

× I love sea I always wanted to go to sea to spend time with my husband and wanted to just relax my mind and relieve all the stress of the day.

✓ I love the sea. I have always wanted to go to the sea to spend time with my husband and just relax my mind and relieve the day's stress.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'sea' when speaking generally about the sea. Use present perfect 'have always wanted' to express a desire continuing to the present. Simplify 'relieve all the stress of the day' to 'relieve the day's stress' for natural phrasing.

× The fresh air and the soothing voice of the water waves gives me so refreshing vibes I.

✓ The fresh air and the soothing sound of the waves give me such refreshing vibes.

Compound subject 'The fresh air and the soothing sound' is plural, so use 'give' (plural verb). 'Voice of the water waves' is unnatural; use 'sound of the waves'. Remove the trailing 'I' and rephrase 'so refreshing vibes' to 'such refreshing vibes' for correct modifier use.