旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your response direct and clear with correct grammar and concise supporting details. Start with a topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancies and incorrect verb forms (e.g., "go travelling", "look at the view").

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I enjoy watching changing landscapes because they relax me, and I often take a few photos to remember particularly beautiful scenes.

建議: Answer clearly and give specific reasons with better vocabulary and linking words. Correct collocations ("take photos", "post on social media") and avoid vague phrases like "collect amazements." Limit to two or three sentences and include a reason or personal example.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of interesting scenes from the car window. For example, I once photographed a dramatic sunset and later posted it on social media; it reminded me of that trip and got a lot of positive comments.

建議: Give a clear preference in one sentence and explain with specific, coherent reasons. Use correct tenses and simpler phrasing (e.g., "my childhood dream"). Avoid filler words and repetition. Provide a brief personal detail or example to support your choice.

範例: I prefer the mountains because I have wanted to visit them since childhood. My parents used to share mountain photos online, and I grew up imagining hiking and seeing those views in real life.

× Yes, as usual whenever I go to the traveling I look the view of outsides and click photos because the view are very precious and it gives natural vibes to me so I just love it by hearing them by my eyes and I can't believe that I'm sitting so.

✓ Yes, as usual whenever I travel I look at the view outside and take photos because the view is very beautiful and gives me a sense of nature, so I just love it and I can't believe I am sitting here.

Errors: incorrect article and noun forms ('the traveling' should be 'travel' or 'travelling' without 'the'); wrong verb + preposition 'look the view' should be 'look at the view'; 'outsides' incorrect plural and word order should be 'outside' or 'outside the window'; 'click photos' is informal and nonstandard — use 'take photos'; subject-verb agreement 'the view are' should be 'the view is'; awkward phrase 'gives natural vibes to me' corrected to 'gives me a sense of nature'; 'by hearing them by my eyes' is illogical and removed; 'sitting so' corrected to 'sitting here'. Suggestions: remove unnecessary articles before uncountable nouns, use correct verb-preposition pairs (look at), use standard collocations (take photos, sense of nature), ensure subject-verb agreement, and keep sentence structure clear by splitting into shorter clauses.

× To be honest, if I see something new and I just click pictures because whenever I click them, I post a video in social media and I get more views.

✓ To be honest, if I see something new I take pictures because whenever I post them on social media I get more views.

Errors: unnecessary conjunction and wordiness 'and I just click pictures' — simplified to 'I take pictures'; incorrect preposition 'in social media' should be 'on social media'; mismatch between 'click them' and 'post a video' — corrected to 'post them' to match 'pictures'. Suggestions: use correct prepositions for platforms ('on social media'), use consistent verbs for actions (take pictures, post them), and avoid redundant words.

× Also, I want to collect amazements for memories for me to look after the journey and it's very good for me.

✓ Also, I want to collect memorable moments to remember the journey, and it's very valuable to me.

Errors: 'collect amazements' is incorrect collocation; use 'collect memorable moments' or 'collect memories'; 'for memories for me to look after the journey' is ungrammatical and unclear — rephrased to 'to remember the journey'; vague 'very good for me' replaced with 'very valuable to me'. Suggestions: choose correct nouns and collocations (memories, memorable moments), simplify phrases to express purpose (to remember the journey), and use clear adjectives (valuable, meaningful).

× I prefer to go to the mountains because this is my childhood dreams when I was in childhood child.

✓ I prefer to go to the mountains because this was my childhood dream.

Errors: number mismatch 'this is my childhood dreams' should be singular 'this was my childhood dream' or 'these were my childhood dreams'; redundant phrase 'when I was in childhood child' is incorrect — simplified to 'in my childhood' if needed. Suggestions: match singular/plural between subject and complement, avoid redundant words, and use past tense when referring to childhood desires.

× I have my parents always seem out some mountains in the umm social media.

✓ My parents always seemed to be looking at pictures of mountains on social media.

Errors: awkward word order 'I have my parents always seem out'; incorrect verb structure 'seem out' — use 'seemed to be looking at'; 'the umm social media' should be 'social media' and preposition 'on social media'; unclear 'out some mountains' corrected to 'pictures of mountains'. Suggestions: use proper verb patterns with 'seem' (seem to be + -ing), correct prepositions for platforms, and place adverbs appropriately.

× So I just uh want to be when I became younger then I will go.

✓ So I wanted to go when I was younger, and I will go when I have the chance.

Errors: tense confusion and broken structure — 'want to be when I became younger' mixes tenses and is ungrammatical; 'then I will go' lacks clear time reference. Suggestions: decide whether describing past desire or future intention and use consistent tense (past: 'I wanted...when I was younger'; future: 'I will go when I have the chance'), and split into two clear clauses for past desire and future plan.