旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Keep answers concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix verb forms and nouns (e.g., “control” is incorrect here).

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because the scenery helps me relax. For example, watching trees and passing houses calms me down, so I feel safer and less anxious during the journey.

建議: Answer directly, then give a specific condition and reason. Use correct tense and collocations (e.g., “take photos,” “share photos with others”). Remove repetitions and ensure clarity.

範例: I sometimes take photos from the car window, but only when the view is especially beautiful. For instance, I will photograph colorful clouds or a striking landscape and then share the best pictures with my friends on social media.

建議: Start with a direct statement of preference, then give concise, specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”). Avoid filler words and repetition; use correct verb agreement and nouns (e.g., “the sound of the waves”).

範例: I prefer the sea because the sound and movement of the waves relax me. For example, listening to the waves and watching sunlight sparkle on the water helps me unwind after a stressful week.

× Yes, I do it it always because by watching the outside and control and controlling the controlling the road, it's making me feel more calm and safety.

✓ Yes, I always do because watching the outside and controlling the road makes me feel calmer and safer.

The sentence contains incorrect use and repetition of verb + -ing forms and awkward phrasing. 'I do it it always' is wrong order and duplicate words; 'by watching' is acceptable but unnecessary; 'control and controlling the controlling the road' is repetitive and ungrammatical. Use the gerund 'watching' and the present participle 'controlling' only where needed, and simplify to 'watching the outside and controlling the road'. Use comparative adjectives 'calmer' and 'safer' for correct form. Suggestion: remove extra words, keep one gerund phrase, and use correct adjective comparatives. Suggestion for improvement: practice forming gerund phrases and avoid repeating verbs; reorder words for natural English ('I always do' or 'I do it always' -> 'I always do').

× I do it sometime but but only if the scenery and the window is really good looks or aesthetic because I like to share with this photo from everyone and sharing what with really good view.

✓ I sometimes take photos, but only if the scenery and the view from the window look really good or are aesthetic, because I like to share these photos with everyone.

Multiple issues: 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb of frequency). 'I do it' is vague; context needs 'take photos'. Subject-verb agreement: 'the scenery and the window is' should be 'scenery and the view ... look' because the compound subject requires plural verb. 'Good looks' is incorrect; use 'look good' or 'are good-looking'. 'Share with this photo from everyone' is ungrammatical; correct is 'share these photos with everyone'. Suggestions: use adverb 'sometimes', use plural agreement with compound subjects, choose correct verbs ('look', 'are') and use 'share X with Y' structure. Suggestion for improvement: focus on matching plural subjects with plural verbs and practice common collocations like 'take photos' and 'share photos with everyone'.

× Actually, I prefer the sea view more because by watching the by watching how the how the water is moving and the making the really, really cool sounds, it make me attract and by watching them, I really, I really, it really makes me calm and it's.

✓ Actually, I prefer the sea view because watching how the water moves and hearing the really nice sounds it makes attracts me, and watching it really calms me.

This sentence has repeated phrases ('by watching the by watching how the how the'), incorrect verb forms ('is moving' can be simplified to 'moves' for habitual or general observation), and incorrect verb agreement ('it make me attract' should be 'it attracts me'). 'Making the really, really cool sounds' is awkward; use 'hearing the sounds it makes'. 'By watching them' is unclear; use singular 'it' for 'the sea view' or 'water'. Also remove trailing incomplete 'and it's.' Suggestions: eliminate repetitions, use simple present for habitual observations ('moves', 'attracts'), and structure the sentence in two clear clauses: what attracts you and how it calms you. Suggestion for improvement: practice avoiding repetition and choose consistent subjects ('it' for singular). Use simple present for general truths and make sure verbs agree with subjects.