旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ естественный, но есть проблемы с грамматикой, стилистикой и избыточностью. Сократите повторения, исправьте грамматические ошибки (например, "a bus or a car" → "a bus or car"; "give me such a feeling" → "gives me a feeling"). Добавьте одно связное предложение с конкретным примером, используя связки (for example, when, because) для улучшения связности.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I find the scenery relaxing. For example, last month I enjoyed watching rolling green fields and small villages on a three-hour bus trip, which helped me unwind and forget about my worries.

建議: Ответ понятен, но содержит повторения, разговорные паузы ("umm") и неуклюжие фразы ("like being a moment"). Нужно убрать запинки, избегать тавтологии и сформулировать более кратко с конкретным примером причины (например, предпочитаю запоминать впечатления лично). Используйте связки (because, so, therefore) для ясности.

範例: Not really. I prefer to watch the view and remember it myself because taking photos can be distracting. For instance, on a recent trip I put my phone away and felt more relaxed while watching the countryside pass by.

建議: Ответ выражает личное мнение, но выглядит эмоционально и фрагментарно — короткие отделённые фразы и повторы снижают связность. Исправьте грамматику ("a big boulders" → "big boulders"), объедините мысли в связные предложения и добавьте объяснение с примером, используя связки (because, for example) чтобы усилить аргументацию.

範例: I prefer the sea because I find it calming and open, whereas mountains make me feel uneasy. For example, when I see steep cliffs or huge boulders I imagine dangerous falls, so I feel more comfortable at the beach.

× Every time I take a ride on a bus or a car, I just look at the gorgeous scenery or landscape and this is such a thrilling feeling.

✓ Every time I take a ride on a bus or in a car, I just look at the gorgeous scenery or landscape, and it gives me such a thrilling feeling.

Use correct preposition with vehicle: 'in a car' (preposition issue but classified as present tense issue per list). Also keep consistent present-tense subject-verb agreement: 'it gives me' instead of 'give me'. Suggestion: use 'in a car' and match singular subject 'it' with 'gives'.

× This is amazing and give me such a feeling of peace.

✓ This is amazing and gives me such a feeling of peace.

Verb must agree with singular subject 'This' in present tense: use 'gives' instead of 'give'. Suggestion: ensure third-person singular verbs end with -s.

× I usually prefer to just look out of the window and enjoy it, to feel calm and peaceful.

✓ I usually prefer just looking out of the window and enjoying it, to feel calm and peaceful.

When using 'prefer', the gerund form ('prefer doing') or the infinitive ('prefer to do') is acceptable, but keep consistent structure. Here gerund forms 'looking' and 'enjoying' are more natural after 'prefer'. Suggestion: choose one pattern and be consistent.

× I don't really like to take pictures of it, I like just being a moment to feel it, to be able to, umm, to be able to enjoy myself.

✓ I don't really like to take pictures of it; I prefer to just be in the moment and enjoy it.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and redundant ('being a moment' is incorrect; repeated 'to be able to'). Fix by using the idiom 'be in the moment'. Suggestion: avoid redundancy and use clear idiomatic phrases.

× I personally prefer sea because mountains honestly can be really scary to me.

✓ I personally prefer the sea because mountains, honestly, can be really scary to me.

When referring to a specific natural feature in general, use the definite article 'the sea'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'the sea' when comparing generally to 'the mountains' or 'mountains'.

× Every time I look out and see mountains I just see a big boulders of stones and I feel terrified.

✓ Every time I look out and see mountains I just see big boulders of stone and I feel terrified.

'A' cannot be used with plural 'boulders' (singular/plural issue). Also 'boulders of stone' is the natural phrase (not 'stones'). Suggestion: use either 'a big boulder of stone' or 'big boulders of stone'.

× Enormous stone.

✓ They look like enormous stones.

Fragment 'Enormous stone.' lacks a verb and is unclear. Convert to a full sentence with subject and verb, e.g., 'They look like enormous stones.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments; include a subject and verb.

× Just no, this is not really for me.

✓ No, this is not really for me.

'Just no' is colloquial and redundant. Simplify to 'No, this is not really for me.' Suggestion: use concise negative expressions in formal responses.