建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make a clear, directly relevant opening sentence, correct grammar, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Use linking words (for example, 'for example', 'because', 'also') and limit to 3–4 short sentences.

範例: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my hometown, including some historic temples and modern apartment blocks. For example, the Golden Temple is a tall historic building that attracts many visitors who take photos. Also, many people live in high-rise apartments because there is limited space for houses.

建議: Answer directly, use correct verb forms and phrasing, avoid unclear or irrelevant details (e.g., 'rating 55'). Mention frequency and reasons with linking words and specific times or examples. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially at sunrise or sunset because the light makes them look beautiful. I usually post my best pictures on Instagram and Snapchat to share the views with friends.

建議: State the building you want to visit clearly, give specific reasons why (historical, religious, architectural), and avoid unclear phrases. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' and 2–3 well-structured sentences.

範例: Yes. I would like to visit the Golden Temple in the nearby city because it is an important historical and religious site. For example, many visitors go there to admire the architecture and to participate in religious services, and I would like to read the holy book and experience the atmosphere.

建議: Give a clear reasoned opinion with one or two specific supporting points (e.g., convenience, views, space). Use conditional grammar correctly and avoid repetition. Keep the answer to 2–3 concise sentences with linking words like 'because' or 'if'.

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it is usually more convenient and offers good views of the city. If I had a large family, I would prefer a big apartment in a high-rise because it provides enough rooms and modern facilities.

× Yes, neighbor hometown.

✓ Yes, there are tall buildings near my hometown.

The original is a fragment and lacks a verb and clear subject; this is a sentence structure error. Provide a complete sentence with subject and verb: 'there are' introduces existence of buildings and 'near my hometown' specifies location. Use this pattern to answer the examiner's question clearly.

× There are many tall buildings, such as some historical temples.

✓ There are many tall buildings and some historical temples.

'Such as' is used to give examples, but combining it with 'many' and 'some' is awkward here. This is a quantifier/word choice issue. Use a parallel structure ('and') or 'such as' with direct examples: 'There are many tall buildings, such as historical temples.'

× Most of the people visit there because they want to be, because they want to take some pictures of the building and upload on Instagram.

✓ Most people visit there because they want to take pictures of the buildings and upload them on Instagram.

'Most of the people' can be simplified to 'Most people.' 'Visit there' is acceptable but 'visit' alone usually suffices with place context. 'Take some pictures of the building' should be plural ('buildings') to match context, and 'upload on Instagram' requires an object: 'upload them on Instagram.' The errors involve agreement and missing objects.

× And some, most of people live in the big build big building because they won't live with their family members.

✓ Many people live in large apartment buildings because they do not live with their family members.

This sentence has incorrect quantifiers and awkward repetition ('big build big building'). Replace with 'many people' and 'large apartment buildings.' Also 'won't live with their family members' is wrong tense/meaning; use 'do not live with' to state a habitual reason. Clarify noun choice 'apartment buildings.'

× Yes, I normally take photos of the building on daily basis by sunrise, sun rising sunset because the view was so good in the middle of in the middle of building.

✓ Yes, I normally take photos of buildings daily at sunrise and sunset because the view is so good between the buildings.

Use present simple for habitual actions: 'I normally take.' Remove redundant phrases ('on daily basis' -> 'daily'). 'Sun rising sunset' is corrected to 'at sunrise and sunset.' 'Was so good' should be present 'is so good' for habitual truth. 'In the middle of in the middle of building' is ungrammatical; use 'between the buildings.'

× And I also blow some pictures on the Instagram and Snapchat because I want to rating 55 on the social media about the buildings.

✓ I also post some pictures on Instagram and Snapchat because I want to get a higher rating on social media for my photos of the buildings.

'Blow' is an incorrect verb here; use 'post' for uploading pictures. 'On the Instagram' should be 'on Instagram.' 'I want to rating 55' is ungrammatical; clarify intent: 'get a higher rating' or 'reach 55 likes'—here 'get a higher rating' is used. Correct preposition and noun forms.

× Yes, in my here near my hometown, there was one big city.

✓ Yes, near my hometown there is a large city.

Use correct word order for 'there is/are' constructions or simply 'near my hometown there is a...' Use present tense 'is' if the city still exists. Remove redundant words ('in my here'). This fixes 'there be' and word order errors.

× Uh, there was there are many tall buildings and I would like to visit there, which is called the Golden Temple, which is more it is a more interesting, interesting building.

✓ There are many tall buildings and I would like to visit the Golden Temple, which is a very interesting building.

Mixing tenses ('was there are') and redundant relative clauses cause pronoun/reference confusion. Use consistent tense ('are') and a single relative clause: 'which is a very interesting building.' Remove repetition 'more it is a more interesting, interesting.'

× Most of the visitor visit there because they want to pay obsession in the Poly temple.

✓ Most visitors go there because they want to pay their respects at the temple.

'Most of the visitor visit' has pluralization and article errors; use 'most visitors.' 'Pay obsession' is incorrect expression; correct phrase is 'pay their respects.' Use 'at the temple' for location. This corrects pluralization, word choice, and preposition use.

× And I also want to read holy book in there before it is a very because it's a very famous building in.

✓ I also want to read the holy book there because it is a very famous place.

Use 'the holy book' with an article. 'Read ... in there before it is a very' is ungrammatical; simplify to 'read the holy book there.' 'Famous building in' should be 'famous place' or 'famous building.' Fix preposition and sentence order.

× Yes, I want to live in a tall building.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable in present tense expressing preference. No change needed. (Included for completeness.)

× Mostly when I go for their big city, there was many tall buildings.

✓ When I visit a big city, there are usually many tall buildings.

Original mixes tenses and uses wrong pronoun 'their.' Use present simple 'there are' for general statements and 'when I visit' for habitual actions. 'Usually' replaces 'mostly' for natural placement.

× If I had a big family, then I prefer to live in a big big building.

✓ If I had a big family, I would prefer to live in a large building.

This conditional mixes past unreal condition with present modal 'prefer.' Use proper second conditional: 'If I had a big family, I would prefer...' Also avoid repetition 'big big'; use 'large' instead. This fixes incorrect conjunction/conditional structure.