建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (umm), fix countable noun forms and word order, and add one specific example to support your statement. Keep it under 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes. My city is quite urbanized, so there are many tall buildings nearby. For example, there is a 30‑storey office tower and several apartment blocks within a five‑minute walk from my home.

建議: Correct verb form and reduce hesitation; give one specific example of the kinds of landscapes you photograph and use a linking phrase to make the contrast clear.

範例: Not really. I don't often photograph buildings because I'm not interested in architecture; instead, I usually take photos of natural scenery, such as mountain ranges at sunrise or rivers during autumn.

建議: Clarify meaning (‘department store’ rather than ‘decisions’), correct sentence structure, remove fillers, and give one specific reason or example of what you buy there. Aim for 2–3 coherent sentences using linking words.

範例: Yes. There is a large department store near my home that I often visit because it is only a ten‑minute drive away. It sells almost everything I need, such as clothes, groceries and electronic accessories, so I usually go there when I need to shop.

建議: Expand slightly with a clear reason and one detail about what you would see or enjoy, and remove hesitations. Use a linking word to connect the reason and an example of the view or benefit.

範例: Yes, I would. Living in a tall building would give me a great view of the city skyline and nearby river, which I think would be relaxing, especially in the evenings.

× Yes, there are a lot of buildings near my home because my city is quite urbanized so umm a wide range of buildings such as commercial facilities and apartment in are located in my city.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of buildings near my home because my city is quite urbanized, so a wide range of buildings such as commercial facilities and apartments are located in my city.

The sentence had a singular/plural mismatch: 'apartment' should be plural 'apartments' to match 'a wide range of buildings' and 'are located' rather than 'in are located'. Also punctuation and word order improved for clarity. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to multiple items and keep subject and verb close together (e.g., 'apartments are located').

× I prefer natural scenery, so I usually photographs landscapes like mountains and rivers.

✓ I prefer natural scenery, so I usually photograph landscapes like mountains and rivers.

The verb 'photographs' is incorrectly inflected for third person singular. The subject 'I' requires the base form 'photograph' (I photograph). Suggestion: after 'I usually', use the base verb form 'photograph'.

× Yes, I like visiting decisions like in department store close to my home.

✓ Yes, I like visiting places like the department store close to my home.

The original sentence uses the wrong noun 'decisions' and has awkward structure. 'Decisions' is incorrect in context; 'places' or 'shops' fits. Also 'in department store' needs an article and correct preposition: 'the department store close to my home'. Suggestion: choose a noun that matches meaning and include the definite article for a specific place ('the department store').

× Uh, it is on it takes only 10 minutes by your car.

✓ It takes only ten minutes by car.

This sentence has redundant and incorrect phrasing: 'it is on it takes' is ungrammatical. Also 'by your car' is unnatural; use 'by car' or 'by car from my home' depending on context. Suggestion: use the simple phrase 'It takes ten minutes by car.'

× Uh, there are almost everything what I want.

✓ There is almost everything I want.

The phrase 'there are almost everything what I want' mixes plural verb 'are' with singular 'everything' and uses 'what' incorrectly. 'Everything' is singular, so use 'There is'. Also omit 'what' after 'everything': 'everything I want'. Suggestion: match verb number to indefinite pronoun and use correct relative structure.

× So whenever I need something or I want to buy, I go there also, umm.

✓ So whenever I need something or want to buy something, I go there.

The clause 'I want to buy' lacks an object; include 'something' or rephrase. 'Also' is unnecessary at the end. Suggestion: provide parallel structure ('need something or want to buy something') and place adverbs appropriately.

× Yes, I do, because, uh, if I live in a tall building, I can see the scenery.

✓ Yes, I do, because if I lived in a tall building, I could see the scenery.

The question asks about willingness to live in a tall building (hypothetical). The original mixes present real condition with modal result. For a hypothetical/unreal situation, use the second conditional: 'If I lived..., I could...'. Suggestion: use consistent conditional tense (past simple in 'if' clause and 'could' for result) when imagining hypothetical situations.