建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, correct mistakes and add a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix grammar (capitalize common nouns properly, correct plurality). Avoid redundancy and keep it under five sentences.

範例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. It’s in a residential subdivision with rows of similar houses and small gardens, so the neighbourhood feels family-oriented and very quiet.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific reason and one clear example using linking words. Correct small grammar issues (article use and noun forms) and prefer precise vocabulary (e.g., façades).

範例: Sometimes. I take photos when a building looks especially attractive because interesting colours and details catch my eye; for example, I often photograph church façades and modern glass buildings for their shapes and textures.

建議: Provide a clear, error-free topic sentence and two coherent supporting details. Remove unclear words (“skies, compass”) and use linking words to connect ideas. Be specific about what you want to see or learn.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Empire State Building in New York because I want to enjoy the panoramic view from its observation deck. In particular, I’d love to see the skyline at sunset and learn about the building’s history and architecture.

建議: Answer directly, correct minor phrasing issues, and add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Use natural collocations (e.g., ‘look out from the balcony’).

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I’m curious about the view. For example, I imagine looking out from the balcony at city lights in the evening would be very exciting.

× It is surrounded by House of the same design and a small garden, which makes the area family oriented and quiet.

✓ It is surrounded by houses of the same design and a small garden, which makes the area family-oriented and quiet.

The noun 'House' should be plural 'houses' to agree with 'surrounded by' referring to multiple dwellings. Also 'family oriented' should be hyphenated as 'family-oriented' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. Suggestion: use plural nouns for multiple items and hyphenate compound adjectives before nouns. Grammar problem type id: 1

× For example, I like to photograph all church or modern glass facade because their shape and textures make good pictures.

✓ For example, I like to photograph old churches or modern glass facades because their shapes and textures make good pictures.

The original uses 'all church' which is incorrect; likely intended 'old church(s)' or 'all church' is wrong quantifier. Also 'facade' should be plural to match 'churches' and 'their' requires plural antecedents. Corrected to 'old churches' (or 'all churches' if meaning every church) and 'glass facades'. 'Shape' should be plural 'shapes' to agree with plural subjects. Suggestion: ensure nouns agree in number with determiners and pronouns. Grammar problem type id: 14

× I would like to visit the Empire State Building in New York because I'm curious to experience the view from one of the city's most famous skies, compass.

✓ I would like to visit the Empire State Building in New York because I'm curious to experience the view from one of the city's most famous skyscrapers.

The phrase 'most famous skies, compass' is incorrect word choice and likely a mistranscription. 'Skyscrapers' is the appropriate noun for tall buildings; 'sky' and 'compass' make no sense here. This is a sentence structure/word choice error. Suggestion: replace incorrect or unclear words with the intended noun 'skyscrapers' to convey meaning clearly. Grammar problem type id: 26

× Yes, I'd like to live in a tall building because I want to experience what it's like to look out in the balcony and see the world below.

✓ Yes, I'd like to live in a tall building because I want to experience what it's like to look out from the balcony and see the world below.

The correct preposition is 'from' when referring to looking out 'from the balcony'. 'Look out in the balcony' is unidiomatic. Suggestion: use 'look out from' or 'stand on the balcony and look out' for natural phrasing. Grammar problem type id: 11

× I actually take photos when a building looks particularly attractive or has interesting colors and details.

✓ I actually take photos when a building looks particularly attractive or has interesting colors and details.

This sentence is grammatically correct; third person singular verb forms 'looks' and 'has' are used correctly with singular subject 'a building'. No change needed. Grammar problem type id: 2

× My home is located in a residential subdivision, so there aren't any tall buildings nearby.

✓ My home is located in a residential subdivision, so there aren't any tall buildings nearby.

This sentence is correct in present tense and use of 'aren't any' for plural 'tall buildings' is appropriate. No change needed. Grammar problem type id: 6

× I'd love to see the skyline at sunset and learn a little about the building's history.

✓ I'd love to see the skyline at sunset and learn a little about the building's history.

This sentence is correct; the gerund/infinitive structures are appropriate ('learn' is base form after 'would love'). No change needed. Grammar problem type id: 8