建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more natural and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give a brief reason and one specific example. Avoid short sentence fragments and correct verb forms (e.g. "there are" not "there have"). Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences).

範例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in the city center. For example, there is a large shopping mall and several office towers within a ten-minute walk. I often walk around that area after dinner to relax and window-shop.

建議: Clarify meaning and fix word choice and grammar. Explain briefly why you take photos and give one specific habit or example. Replace unclear phrases (e.g. "sing some famous buildings") with correct verbs ("see" or "study"). Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I do. As a landscape architecture student, I study and photograph interesting buildings to learn about design. For instance, I often photograph historic façades and then send the best shots to my girlfriend because she likes using them as backgrounds.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons with correct grammar. Use linking words (because, for example) and be specific about what interests you (architecture, history, gardens). Avoid vague phrases like "very, very deep cultural."

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Summer Palace in Beijing because it is a fine example of traditional Chinese architecture. For example, I want to see its elaborate pavilions, long corridors and imperial gardens, and learn about the palace's historical role in Chinese culture.

建議: Start with a clear direct answer, then give two specific reasons using linking words (because, so). Fix word choice ("live" instead of "leave"). Keep it concise and avoid listing too many activities without linking them logically.

範例: Not really, I would prefer to live in a large house because it offers much more space. For example, I could host parties comfortably and even have a private gym where I can play basketball with friends.

× For sure there are many tall buildings near my home.

✓ For sure, there are many tall buildings near my home.

Add a comma after the introductory phrase 'For sure' for clarity and natural written punctuation; grammatically the sentence is correct otherwise. Use of 'there are' is appropriate for plural buildings.

× Because I live in the center of the city, there have a lot of buildings such as some public buildings and some big mall.

✓ Because I live in the center of the city, there are a lot of buildings, such as public buildings and some big malls.

The phrase 'there have' is incorrect. Use the 'there be' construction with the correct form 'there are' for plural nouns (ID 3). Also change 'big mall' to plural 'big malls' to match 'a lot of buildings' and remove redundant 'some' before 'public buildings'. Add commas for clarity.

× I always walk there after dinner.

✓ I always walk there after dinner.

This sentence is grammatically correct. The present simple tense 'walk' correctly expresses a habitual action, so no change is needed.

× Yes absolutely.

✓ Yes, absolutely.

Add a comma to separate interjection 'Yes' from 'absolutely' for correct punctuation; no verb change required.

× I love buildings and I major in landscape architecture so I always sing some famous buildings and take photos of buildings and my girlfriend like photos.

✓ I love buildings and I major in landscape architecture, so I always shoot photos of famous buildings, and my girlfriend likes the photos.

Multiple issues: 'sing' is incorrect verb choice; use 'shoot photos of' or 'photograph' (verb usage mapped to '-ing form' but here replacement needed). 'take photos of buildings' is redundant; combine. 'my girlfriend like photos' has incorrect verb agreement and missing article: 'girlfriend likes the photos' (ID 2 and 27). Use commas to join clauses.

× I always send buildings as a background for her.

✓ I always use buildings as a background for her.

Verb choice 'send' is incorrect; 'use' fits the meaning. The phrase 'for her' is acceptable but more natural is 'to her' if sending images; if meaning setting as background for her, 'for her' works. This fixes pronoun usage and verb selection (ID 12).

× Actually, I would like to visit Summer Palace in Beijing, because the Summer Palace is traditional buildings in China.

✓ Actually, I would like to visit the Summer Palace in Beijing, because the Summer Palace is a traditional building in China.

Proper nouns like 'Summer Palace' usually take the definite article 'the' (ID 22/17). 'is traditional buildings' is wrong number agreement and article: singular subject requires 'a traditional building' (ID 1 and 22).

× There are a lot of historical background and have very, very deep cultural.

✓ There is a lot of historical background and very deep culture.

'There are a lot of historical background' mixes plural verb with singular noun: 'background' is uncountable, so use 'There is a lot of historical background' (ID 3/1). 'have very, very deep cultural' is ungrammatical: use noun 'culture' with adjective 'deep' — 'very deep culture'. Remove extra 'have'.

× Oh, not really.

✓ Oh, not really.

This short response is fine as a natural reply; no change needed.

× I want to leave a big house because the space is vast and I have a lot of room to do anything.

✓ I want to live in a big house because the space is vast and I would have a lot of room to do anything.

'leave a big house' is wrong verb; context asks about living, so use 'live' not 'leave' (ID 12). Change 'I have' to 'I would have' to match conditional desire; improves tense consistency (ID 6/7).

× And I can take a party with my friend and play games, play basketball in my private gym.

✓ And I could have parties with my friends and play games, or play basketball in my private gym.

'take a party' is incorrect collocation; use 'have a party' or 'have parties'. 'my friend' should be plural 'my friends' to match activities with multiple people. 'can' to 'could' matches the hypothetical desire (modal verb usage, ID 4). Use 'or' to list activities naturally.