建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, ngắn gọn và chính xác hơn. Sử dụng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: "tall buildings", không phải "tools building"), và cung cấp một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về các tòa nhà (ví dụ: vị trí, chiều cao, chức năng). Tránh lặp từ và đảm bảo tối đa 4-5 câu.

範例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, my apartment complex, Imperial Garden, and a nearby tower called Diamond Palace are both quite high. They mainly contain residential flats and some shops on the ground floor. I can see them clearly from my balcony.

建議: Câu trả lời cần dùng từ vựng chính xác và tránh lặp từ. Thay "gay" (không phù hợp) bằng từ phù hợp như "grand" hoặc "impressive"; dùng danh từ số nhiều/hình thức đúng (buildings). Bổ sung một vài chi tiết cụ thể về việc chụp (ví dụ: khi nào, thiết bị, phong cách). Giữ 2-4 câu.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings because their grand shapes and impressive skylines fascinate me. I usually take photos in the late afternoon when the light is warm, using my phone or a small camera. I focus on interesting angles and architectural details.

建議: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng lặp từ và ngữ pháp cần cải thiện. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn, dùng linking words để nối lý do (e.g., "because", "and"), và cung cấp các chi tiết cụ thể hơn (ví dụ: loại tiện ích, quan sát gì ở trên cao). Giữ 3-4 câu, tránh lặp từ 'very'.

範例: I would like to visit Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City because it is one of the tallest buildings in Vietnam. It houses shopping malls, restaurants and observation decks, so I could try new foods and enjoy panoramic city views. Visiting would help me learn more about modern architecture and city life.

建議: Cần câu trả lời mạch lạc, tránh lặp từ ('new new people') và sửa ngữ pháp. Bắt đầu với câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No and reason), sau đó nêu 2-3 lý do cụ thể (an ninh, tiện ích, xã hội). Dùng linking words (e.g., "because", "and", "also") để liên kết ý. Giữ tối đa 4 câu.

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it usually offers good security and convenient facilities. I could meet neighbors in communal areas and make new friends, and there are often parks or gardens nearby for relaxation. Overall, living there would feel safe and comfortable.

× There are many tools building like near my home like my apartment imperial garden and the nearby apartment is Diamond Palace.

✓ There are many tall buildings near my home, such as my apartment Imperial Garden and the nearby Diamond Palace.

The original sentence has incorrect word choice ('tools' instead of 'tall'), repeated 'like', missing punctuation and awkward word order. Correct by using 'tall buildings', 'such as' to give examples, capitalization for proper nouns, and commas to separate items. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary, avoid repeating 'like', and use commas for lists.

× Yes, I love taking photos of building because I love the gay, gigantic and big landscape and the very breathtaking views of building.

✓ Yes, I love taking photos of buildings because I love the grand, gigantic landscape and the breathtaking views of the buildings.

Errors include singular/plural mismatch ('building' should be 'buildings'), awkward word choice ('gay' likely wrong meaning), redundant adjectives ('gigantic and big'), and missing articles. Correct by using plural 'buildings', replace 'gay' with 'grand' or another appropriate adjective, avoid redundancy, and add 'the' before 'buildings' when specific. Suggestion: use varied, precise adjectives and ensure noun-adjective agreement.

× I would like to visit Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City because it is a very tall building with many facilities and many brand new thing to try out and many restaurants.

✓ I would like to visit Landmark 81 in Ho Chi Minh City because it is a very tall building with many facilities, many brand-new things to try, and many restaurants.

Errors: 'thing' should be plural 'things'; 'brand new' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective before a noun; missing commas for list. Correct by pluralizing 'things', hyphenating 'brand-new', and adding commas. Suggestion: pay attention to countable nouns and hyphenation for compound adjectives.

× I love that building because it is very big and very tall.

✓ I love that building because it is very large and very tall.

While grammatically acceptable, 'big' is informal and repetitive with 'very'. Replacing 'big' with 'large' improves register and avoids repetition. Suggestion: vary adjectives to improve style.

× So I want to visit it to broaden my knowledge and to see it.

✓ So I want to visit it to broaden my knowledge and see it in person.

Repeating 'to' and 'it' makes the sentence awkward. Use parallel structure ('to broaden... and see...') and a clearer phrase 'in person'. Suggestion: use parallel verb forms and avoid unnecessary repetition.

× That's all I want to live in the tall building because of its security makes me feel really safe and I could meet new people, new new people there, makes new friends and I could go to the garden, go to the park nearby.

✓ I want to live in a tall building because its security makes me feel really safe; I could meet new people and make friends, and I could go to the garden or the nearby park.

Multiple issues: 'That's all' is incorrect in context; awkward clause 'because of its security makes me feel' should be 'because its security makes me feel'; repeated 'new new people'; mixed verb forms ('could meet' and 'makes new friends'). Correct by removing 'that's all', fixing clause order, removing repetition, and using parallel verbs. Suggestion: keep clauses clear, avoid repetition, and use parallel structure for lists.

× So yes, I want to live in a tall building because of it. Great facilities and benefit.

✓ So yes, I want to live in a tall building because of its great facilities and benefits.

Fragment 'Great facilities and benefit' is not a complete sentence and 'benefit' should be plural 'benefits'. Merge into previous sentence and pluralize. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and ensure nouns match number.