建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether tall buildings are near your home. Avoid hesitations and unnecessary details like exact room counts unless asked. Use correct grammar: plural forms, verb tenses, and articles. Organize one or two supporting details using linking words (for example, because/since).

範例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, a new apartment complex was built recently and it stands out because it is much taller than the surrounding houses. I can see it from my street, and it has shops on the ground floor, which makes the area more convenient.

建議: Answer directly and use simple, accurate sentences. Say whether you take photos and give specific reasons or examples. Use correct verb forms and singular/plural agreement, and link ideas with words like because or for example. Keep it to two or three sentences.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of interesting buildings because I like their architectural details. For example, I photographed an old mosque last month that has beautiful carvings, and I keep those photos to remember my country’s cultural heritage.

建議: Be specific about which building you want to visit and why. Use clear reasons and limit repetition. Include linking words (because, for example, so) and one or two supporting details about what you hope to see or learn. Use correct tense and avoid repeating phrases.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the old city palace because it has a lot of historical information and unique architecture. For example, I want to see the ancient murals and learn about the palace’s history, and I hope to visit it at least once more to explore everything thoroughly.

建議: Give a clear opinion and support it with two brief, specific reasons. Avoid repetition and correct common errors (articles, word choice: 'live in a tall building', 'rooms', 'walk with family' should be clarified). Use linking words like because or so to connect reasons.

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it often has better security and modern facilities. For instance, my preferred apartment would have spacious bedrooms and a rooftop garden where my family and I could walk and relax.

× there are many building coming in my hometown

✓ there are many buildings coming up in my hometown

The noun 'building' should be plural because 'many' requires a plural noun. Also add 'up' after 'coming' to make the phrasal verb 'coming up' which is natural for new constructions. Suggestion: use plural nouns with quantifiers like many (e.g., many buildings).

× The first building was very tall to my hometown and I, when I entered that building, there have UH3 bedrooms and UH-1 work kitchen and one storeroom also

✓ The first building was very tall compared to other buildings in my hometown, and when I entered that building, there were three bedrooms, a kitchen with a workspace, and a storeroom

Multiple issues: 'tall to my hometown' is incorrect preposition and comparison; use 'compared to' or 'for'. 'have UH3 bedrooms' mixes tense and form; use past there were and write numbers as words or digits consistently ('three bedrooms'). 'UH-1 work kitchen' is unclear; I changed to 'a kitchen with a workspace'. Use parallel listing with commas. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use 'there was/were' for existence in past descriptions.

× there have UH3 bedrooms and UH-1 work kitchen and one storeroom also

✓ there were three bedrooms, a kitchen with a workspace, and a storeroom

The phrase 'there have' is incorrect; the proper existential construction is 'there were' for plural nouns in the past. Use 'there was' for singular and 'there were' for plural. Also list items with commas and 'and' before the last item.

× And so I, I, I, so I decided to change my bedrooms, uh, complex

✓ So I decided to change my bedroom complex

Repeated fillers ('I, I, I') should be removed. 'Change my bedrooms, complex' is ungrammatical; combine into 'change my bedroom complex' or 'move to a different apartment'. Ensure noun phrases are coherent.

× Yes, I took the photos that building and that time that, uh, that building has a unique style to representing to other and other building

✓ Yes, I took photos of that building, and at that time it had a unique style that represented other buildings

Tense inconsistency and incorrect verb forms: use past tense 'had' to match 'took'. Use 'photos of that building' rather than 'the photos that building'. 'to representing to other and other building' is incorrect; use 'that represented other buildings'. Keep verbs and clauses consistent in past narrative.

× So we, uh, we saw more pictures than later to the historical places

✓ So later we saw more pictures of historical places

Awkward word order and incorrect preposition 'to'. Place time expression 'later' before the verb for clarity. Use 'pictures of historical places' with preposition 'of'. Avoid filler repetitions.

× That photos has a great styles to representing my historical culture of my country and I never to forget that photos

✓ Those photos had a great style representing the historical culture of my country, and I will never forget them

'That photos' is wrong: use 'those photos' for plural demonstrative. 'has' should be 'had' to match past narrative and 'a great styles' should be 'a great style' or 'great styles' with correct article. 'to representing' should be 'representing'. 'I never to forget that photos' should be 'I will never forget them' or 'I never forgot them' depending on intended meaning. Use pronoun 'them' to refer to photos.

× Yes, I would like to visit that building because there were there were there are many things to explain the historical buildings and historical places

✓ Yes, I would like to visit that building because there are many things that explain the history of the building and the place

Mixed and repeated 'there were there were there are' is incorrect and confusing. Use present 'there are' or 'there were' consistently depending on whether you mean currently. Also 'things to explain the historical buildings' is awkward; use 'things that explain the history of the building and the place.' Keep existential 'there is/are' correct.

× historical things about these type of matters were are very unique for me

✓ historical aspects of these matters are very unique to me

Awkward phrase 'historical things' should be 'historical aspects'. 'these type of matters' should be 'these types of matters' (plural) or 'this type of matter' (singular). 'were are' is redundant; choose one tense. Use 'unique to me' rather than 'for me'.

× I never do this type of building in my life

✓ I have never seen or experienced this type of building in my life

Present simple 'I never do' is incorrect for this context; use present perfect 'I have never' to relate life experience. 'do this type of building' is wrong verb choice; use 'seen' or 'experienced'.

× So I visit once more at least again that

✓ So I will visit it at least once more

Word order and tense: use future 'I will visit' for planned future action. 'once more at least again that' is ungrammatical; reorder to 'at least once more' and place object 'it' after the verb.

× Yes, I like to yes, I like to yes, I like to leave it all building in my in my life

✓ Yes, I would like to live in a tall building in my life

Multiple issues: 'leave' should be 'live'. Remove repeated fillers. 'it all building' is garbled; correct phrase is 'a tall building'. Place time phrase 'in my life' optionally at end. Use modal 'would like to' for polite desire.

× I need I need to live in my life to this building

✓ I need to live in this building in my life

Unnecessary repetition 'I need I need'. Word order wrong: 'to live in this building' is the correct infinitive phrase. Place 'in my life' after or omit if redundant. Use infinitive 'to live', not present participle.

× This building has a great room for sleeping and also walking with my family members

✓ This building has a great bedroom for sleeping and good space for walking with my family members

'Room for sleeping' is awkward; 'bedroom' is more natural. 'walking with my family members' is unclear; specify 'space for walking' or 'a good area where I can walk with my family'. Ensure noun choices match intended meaning.

× So I liked it very much

✓ So I like it very much

Tense should match general preference; use present simple 'I like it very much' for a lasting preference. Use past 'liked' only if referring to a past impression.

× I want to purchase this building in my life so

✓ I want to purchase this building in my life

Remove trailing 'so'. Sentence is understandable but 'in my life' is awkward; better: 'I want to buy this building someday' or 'I hope to purchase this building someday'. Use 'buy' or 'purchase' and time adverb 'someday' for clarity.