建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Avoid repetition and small grammar mistakes (e.g., skyscraper, subject-verb agreement). Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home in Chennai. For example, the LIC building is one of the city’s tallest landmarks. Because Chennai is a major city, you can see several modern skyscrapers in the downtown area.

建議: Be more precise and reduce repetition. Use a clear structure: say whether you take photos, give a specific reason, and give one example of what you photograph. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'one of my hobbies', 'shadows fall').

範例: Yes, I often photograph buildings because photography is one of my hobbies. I especially enjoy capturing the long shadows that tall buildings cast at sunrise and sunset. For example, I like photographing a colonial-era office block from different angles to show its ornate details.

建議: Make your reply clearer and more fluent. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give vivid but concise details. Fix grammar (e.g., 'located near the seashore', 'you can see the whole city', 'it would be a pleasure'). Try using linking words like 'for example' or 'from there' to connect details.

範例: I would like to visit the Chennai lighthouse. It stands by the seashore, and from the top you can see the whole city at once. For example, you can look left to see the beach and right to see the urban skyline, which would be a wonderful view.

建議: Avoid rhetorical questions and exaggeration. Give a clear opinion sentence, then provide two specific reasons. Improve sentence variety and correct small mistakes (e.g., 'you can see the area below you', 'it makes you feel like you are living among the clouds').

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building. From a high floor you get excellent views of sunrises and sunsets, and during foggy weather it can feel as if you are living among the clouds. For instance, my apartment on a higher floor would allow me to enjoy peaceful city views each morning.

× Yes there are tall buildings near my home because I live in Chennai which is the capital of Tamil Nadu so they usually have skyscaper buildings and the tallest building in Chennai is known as the LIC building which is a life insurance company bank building.

✓ Yes, there are tall buildings near my home because I live in Chennai, which is the capital of Tamil Nadu, so the city usually has skyscraper buildings; the tallest building in Chennai is the LIC building, which belongs to a life insurance company.

The sentence contains incorrect use of 'they' to refer to 'Chennai' and awkward noun phrase 'a life insurance company bank building.' Use 'there are' correctly and refer to the city with 'the city' or 'Chennai' instead of 'they'. Also clarify ownership: 'LIC building, which belongs to a life insurance company.' Add commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× So it does have a large tall buildings in our city.

✓ So it does have large tall buildings in our city.

'Buildings' is plural, so the indefinite article 'a' before 'large' is incorrect. Remove 'a' when using plural nouns. Also 'large' and 'tall' both modify 'buildings' — keep both adjectives but no article.

× Oh yes, I do take a lot of photos of buildings because photography is one of my hobby which I really like to do.

✓ Oh yes, I do take a lot of photos of buildings because photography is one of my hobbies, which I really like to do.

'One of my hobby' should be 'one of my hobbies' because 'one of' requires a plural noun. Add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which I really like to do.'

× And the tall buildings, the shadows of the buildings will be falling on the ground during sunset and sunrise, and to see the shadows of the building, it will be so good.

✓ With tall buildings, the shadows fall on the ground during sunset and sunrise, and seeing those shadows looks very beautiful.

Avoid future progressive 'will be falling' when describing regular occurrences; use present simple 'fall.' 'It will be so good' is vague — use a clearer adjective like 'beautiful.' Also replace 'the shadows of the building' with 'those shadows' to avoid repetition.

× I love taking pictures of various buildings from different angles.

✓ I love taking pictures of various buildings from different angles.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Plural noun 'buildings' matches 'various.' Included here to indicate no issue.

× It is the lighthouse building in Chennai which is located near to the seashore and once you get to the top of the lighthouse, you can able to see the whole city in a single view.

✓ It is the lighthouse in Chennai, which is located near the seashore, and once you get to the top of the lighthouse, you can see the whole city in a single view.

Use 'near the seashore' (no 'to' after 'near'). Also remove 'able' after 'can' — 'can able to' is incorrect; use 'can see.' Simplify 'lighthouse building' to 'lighthouse.'

× It'll be so good when you're standing in a lighthouse, you can see you can witness the beach on the left and then the city is on the right.

✓ It is great: when you're standing in the lighthouse, you can witness the beach on the left and the city on the right.

Avoid repeating 'you can' twice. 'It'll be so good' is colloquial and shifts tense; use 'It is great' or 'It will be great' depending on context. Also add 'the' before 'lighthouse' for a specific landmark.

× It'll be so pleasure give.

✓ It would be such a pleasure.

Original phrase is ungrammatical. Use the noun phrase 'such a pleasure' with an appropriate auxiliary: 'It would be such a pleasure' or 'It would be very pleasant.'

× Who will not want to live in a tall building?

✓ Who wouldn't want to live in a tall building?

Use the contracted negative 'wouldn't' for a natural rhetorical question in this context. Both forms are grammatically possible, but 'Who wouldn't want...' is idiomatic.

× I would always love to live in a tall building because when you get to the top of the building, you can see the whole world below you.

✓ I would love to live in a tall building because when you get to the top, you can see the whole world below you.

Remove 'always' which is unnecessary and slightly changes meaning. Also omit the repeated 'the building' after 'top' for conciseness.

× So it feels really great to live in a tall building so that you can witness a beautiful sunrise, sunset, and it also makes you feel like you are living inside the clouds during foggy season.

✓ It feels great to live in a tall building because you can witness beautiful sunrises and sunsets, and it also makes you feel like you are living in the clouds during the foggy season.

Replace second 'so' with 'because' to explain reason. Use plural 'sunrises and sunsets' for generality. Add 'the' before 'foggy season' and use 'in the clouds' instead of 'inside the clouds.'