建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Correct articles and plural forms, and avoid repetition. Use linking words like “for example” or “generally” if you add details.

範例: Yes. There are some tall buildings near my home. For example, the tallest ones are about seven or eight storeys high, which is the usual maximum height in our city.

建議: Give a concise, natural answer and one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid repetition and vague phrases. Use linking words such as “because” or “such as” to organize details.

範例: Yes, I often photograph buildings because I like their architecture. For example, I take pictures of tall or ornately decorated buildings, especially those with religious motifs or interesting facades.

建議: Answer directly and correct confusing phrasing. State the building and one clear reason why you want to visit. Keep it to one topic sentence plus one supporting detail using linking words like “because” or “because of”.

範例: Yes. I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest building in the world and I want to see the view from the observation deck.

建議: Make your condition and reasons clear and grammatical. State your main idea, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words like “if” and “because”. Avoid long, run-on sentences.

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building if I could occupy two or three floors. That way I could meet neighbours more easily and learn about their work, which might help me join a similar career.

× Yes, near my home there are a tall buildings and the buildings are like very tall.

✓ Yes, near my home there are tall buildings, and the buildings are very tall.

The noun 'buildings' is plural, so the singular article 'a' is incorrect. Remove 'a' and match plural noun with no article or use 'some'. Also 'are like very tall' is non-native; use 'are very tall'. Suggestion: Use 'a' with singular nouns ('a tall building') and no article or 'some' with plural nouns ('tall buildings' or 'some tall buildings').

× In our society it's a taller building, likely 7 to 8 floor and in our city this is the maximum height of an building.

✓ In our neighborhood there is a tall building, about seven or eight floors, and in our city this is the maximum height of a building.

Several article errors: 'a taller building' is odd here; use 'a tall building'. 'Society' is wrong context; use 'neighborhood'. '7 to 8 floor' must be plural 'seven or eight floors'. 'an building' uses 'an' before consonant sound; correct is 'a building'. Suggestion: Use 'a' before consonant sounds and 'an' before vowel sounds; make nouns and numbers agree in plurality ('floors').

× Yes, I take photos of the buildings that are that are so much tall or good looking buildings likely decorated or any type of other decorations, likely religion, support or freedom and anything else.

✓ Yes, I take photos of buildings that are very tall or attractive, often because they are decorated for religious, cultural, or other reasons.

Awkward repetition ('that are that are') and unnatural expressions ('so much tall', 'good looking buildings likely decorated', 'likely religion, support or freedom'). Use 'very tall' not 'so much tall' and 'attractive' instead of 'good looking' in this context. Simplify and clarify reasons: 'decorated for religious or cultural reasons'. Suggestion: Avoid repetition, use 'very tall' for degree, and group reasons clearly ('for religious or cultural reasons').

× Yes, there's a building that I would like to visit in my future as it is in Dubai and I don't think so that it is in building.

✓ Yes, there's a building that I would like to visit in the future; it is in Dubai, and I don't think there is anything else like it.

The phrase 'in my future' is non-native; use 'in the future'. 'I don't think so that it is in building' is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely intent: emphasize uniqueness; rephrase to 'I don't think there is anything else like it.' Suggestion: Use 'in the future' for general future plans and avoid literal translations like 'I don't think so that...'; express uniqueness clearly ('I don't think there is another building like it').

× Its name is Burj Khalifa. It is in famous monument, a monument type and I like to visit that.

✓ Its name is Burj Khalifa. It is a famous monument, and I would like to visit it.

Use the article 'a' with 'famous monument' ('a famous monument'). 'It is in famous monument' is incorrect preposition and structure. 'I like to visit that' should be 'I would like to visit it' for future desire. Suggestion: Use correct article placement ('a famous monument') and replace 'that' with 'it' when referring to the building; use 'would like' for polite future intentions.

× Yes I want to live in a tall building if the if I can control the 2, two or three floors of the building as I can meet the people and know their mindset and what they do and how they do as I want to also join their career so I can.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building if I can control two or three floors so I can meet the people, understand their mindsets and what they do, and possibly join their careers.

Redundant phrases ('the if'), number format inconsistent ('2, two or three'). 'Control the floors' is unusual but kept; 'mindset' should be plural 'mindsets'. 'As I want to also join their career so I can' is run-on and unclear; rephrase concisely. Use modal/conditional structure properly: 'if I can'. Suggestion: Remove redundancy, use numerals consistently or write out numbers ('two or three'), pluralize 'mindsets', and complete the final clause clearly ('and possibly join their careers').