建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và tự nhiên hơn, dùng cấu trúc ngắn gọn làm câu chủ đề, sửa ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, và cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn. Ví dụ: sửa lỗi chia thì, danh từ số ít/ nhiều, và chọn từ phù hợp (Landmark 81 là một toà tháp đa chức năng, không phải "a supermarket which include house shop").

範例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. I live in one of Vietnam's largest cities, so landmarks like Landmark 81 dominate the skyline. Landmark 81 is a mixed-use skyscraper with shops, offices and apartments, and you can often see people taking photos there.

建議: Câu trả lời khá tốt nhưng nên ngắn gọn hơn, tránh nói vòng và dùng liên từ để liên kết ý rõ ràng. Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về khi nào hoặc về loại ảnh bạn chụp sẽ giúp tăng tính thuyết phục và cụ thể.

範例: Yes, I do, but only occasionally. I enjoy photographing urban scenery—especially cityscapes and tall buildings—because I like their shapes and architectural details. For example, I often take photos at sunset when the light highlights building silhouettes.

建議: Nên cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn: nêu chủ đề, giải thích lý do, và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "see it historical architecture once". Sử dụng từ vựng chính xác ("historic" thay vì "historical" nếu phù hợp) và nói khi bạn dự định tới thăm.

範例: Yes. I'd like to visit the Notre Dame Cathedral in my city. I haven't been there because it's under renovation, but in the future I hope to see its historic architecture and take a guided tour to learn about its history.

建議: Câu có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ "living Tibetans" là sai; có lẽ ý là "living in tall buildings"; "many beneficial" và "sense of comfortable" sai ngữ pháp). Nên mở đầu trực tiếp, so sánh ngắn gọn lý do thích/không thích với ví dụ cụ thể, và sửa lỗi cấu trúc (adjective vs noun, collocations: "bring me a sense of comfort").

範例: I prefer living in a detached house rather than a tall building. Although high-rise apartments can be convenient and offer great views, I value privacy and outdoor space, so a house gives me a greater sense of comfort.

× I live in one of the biggest city in Vietnam so there are many tall buildings near my home.

✓ I live in one of the biggest cities in Vietnam, so there are many tall buildings near my home.

'One of the' requires a plural noun after it; use 'cities' instead of 'city'. Also add a comma before 'so' for clarity.

× For example, Landmark 81 is the highest building in Vietnam and it is a supermarket which include house shop.

✓ For example, Landmark 81 is the tallest building in Vietnam, and it is a complex that includes shops and a shopping mall.

Use 'tallest' (superlative of tall) not 'highest' when describing a building's height relative to others. 'Which include' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; use 'includes'. 'House shop' is non-idiomatic; clarify as 'shops' or 'a shopping mall'. Also add a comma before 'and'.

× Well, I'll say I do, but only occasionally.

✓ Well, I'd say I do, but only occasionally.

'I'd say' (I would say) is the natural conditional/modal phrase for expressing opinion; 'I'll say' implies a future action and is unnatural here.

× I really like to take photos of urban scenery, such as tall buildings, especially some cityscapes near my home because I like the shapes and details.

✓ I really like taking photos of urban scenery, such as tall buildings, especially cityscapes near my home, because I like their shapes and details.

Use 'like taking' (gerund) to express a general preference. 'Some cityscapes' is unnecessary; 'their' refers back to 'buildings' or 'cityscapes' to avoid repetition.

× Yes, of course. There is a building in my city called Notre Dame Cathedral and I haven't visited it yet because it is currently under renovation.

✓ Yes, of course. There is a building in my city called Notre Dame Cathedral, and I haven't visited it yet because it is currently under renovation.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; added a comma before 'and' for clarity. The 'there is' construction is used correctly.

× So in the future I would like to see it historical architecture once.

✓ So in the future I would like to see its historical architecture once.

Use possessive pronoun 'its' to modify 'historical architecture'. Also 'see its historical architecture once' is slightly awkward; better: 'visit it to see its historical architecture.' 'See' can pair with 'visit' for clarity.

× Well, while I acknowledge that living Tibetans may have many beneficial, I still love living in detached house because it brings me a sense of comfortable.

✓ Well, while I acknowledge that living in tall buildings may have many benefits, I still love living in a detached house because it makes me feel comfortable.

Original sentence had several issues: 'living Tibetans' is incorrect — likely intended 'living in tall buildings'; 'beneficial' is an adjective, use noun 'benefits'; 'detached house' requires an article 'a'; 'brings me a sense of comfortable' is incorrect — use 'makes me feel comfortable' or 'gives me a sense of comfort'.