建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with grammar and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct plural/singular forms, and avoid vague conclusions. Use one linking phrase to add a specific example or reason.

範例: Yes. I live in the city, so there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, the block next to my apartment includes office towers, apartment complexes and a hotel. Because of this mix, the area is busy with both residents and tourists.

建議: Organise your response with a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'astounded' and 'amazed'). Check tense and phrasing (use 'saw' or 'visited' rather than 'witnessed' for buildings).

範例: Sometimes. It depends on the building. For example, when I visited Metro Manila I saw the Metrobank Center, a 66‑storey skyscraper, and I took a photo to remember the view and the impressive scale of the building.

建議: Avoid hesitation and repetition. Provide one clear reason why you want to visit and a brief personal detail. Use correct verb forms and finish sentences fully.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is one of the tallest buildings in the world and its design is extraordinary. If I go, I would like to go to the observation deck to enjoy the panoramic views and take photos of the city below.

建議: Give a direct answer first, then support it with one or two concise reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because' or 'so'). Fix small phrasing issues ('one‑storey bungalow' instead of 'one floor story').

範例: Not really. I am afraid of heights, so I wouldn't feel comfortable living in a tall building. Besides, I prefer a one‑storey bungalow because I like easy access to the garden and a quieter lifestyle.

× These buildings houses different purposes such as residential areas, offices, businesses and hotels.

✓ These buildings serve different purposes such as residential areas, offices, businesses and hotels.

The original sentence uses the plural noun 'buildings' with the singular verb 'houses', causing a subject-verb mismatch and unnatural meaning. This is a singular/plural issue because 'houses' here is mistakenly a verb form. Use a plural-appropriate verb phrase 'serve' to agree with the plural subject and convey the intended meaning. Suggestion: use verbs that agree in number with the subject; for example, 'These buildings serve...' or rephrase as 'A variety of uses for these buildings are...'.

× For example, when I was in Metro Manila, I witnessed the tallest building which is the Metro Bank Center, a 66 story skyscraper.

✓ For example, when I was in Metro Manila, I saw the tallest building, the Metrobank Center, a 66-story skyscraper.

The phrase 'witnessed the tallest building which is the Metro Bank Center' is wordy and uses 'which is' unnecessarily. Also 'Metro Bank Center' is more commonly written as 'Metrobank Center' and '66 story' needs a hyphen when used as a compound adjective. This is an article/wording issue (treated under article errors here) and style correction. Suggestion: remove 'witnessed' in favor of 'saw' for natural speech and use hyphenation for compound adjectives: '66-story'.

× I took a photo of it mainly for memory but also I was astounded by the amazing view and amazed by how tall it was, especially seeing it.

✓ I took a photo of it mainly for memory, and I was astounded by the amazing view and by how tall it was.

The original sentence repeats similar adjectives ('astounded' and 'amazed') and ends with an awkward phrase 'especially seeing it.' The issue involves incorrect or unnecessary verb/adjective usage and an awkward clause. Use parallel structure and remove the redundant phrase. This aligns with problems in past participle/adjective usage. Suggestion: keep parallel structure ('astounded... and by how...') and avoid redundant synonyms; remove 'especially seeing it.'.

× I heard that it is a 163 story glass skyscraper.

✓ I heard that it is a 163-story glass skyscraper.

The main issue here is missing hyphenation in the compound adjective '163-story'. This is categorized under present tense/formatting issue because the tense is fine but the modifier needs correct form. Use a hyphen between a numeral and the noun when used adjectivally. Suggestion: write '163-story' when used before a noun.

× So when I when I get the chance to go there, I would be amazed and astounded by how beautiful it has been built and.

✓ So when I get the chance to go there, I would be amazed and astounded by how beautifully it has been built.

The sentence repeats 'when I' and ends with an extra conjunction 'and.' Also 'how beautiful it has been built' should use the adverb 'beautifully' to modify the verb 'built.' This falls under present tense/participle usage and adverb/adjective choice. Use 'beautifully' for manner and remove duplicate words and trailing 'and.' Suggestion: remove duplicate 'when I' and use 'beautifully' to modify 'built'.

× I am amazed by the architecture of tall buildings.

✓ I am amazed by the architecture of tall buildings.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It uses the present continuous 'am' plus past participle 'amazed' correctly and the preposition 'by' appropriately. No change necessary. Included only for completeness. Suggestion: none.

× Mainly because I dream of just living in a bungalow house with a one floor story and I think that is more me.

✓ Mainly because I dream of living in a bungalow with a single floor, and I think that suits me better.

'Bungalow house' is redundant (bungalow implies a house), 'one floor story' is ungrammatical and redundant; this is a singular/plural and word-choice issue. Use 'single floor' or 'one storey' (British spelling) and avoid repeating 'house' and 'story.' Also 'that is more me' is informal and awkward; 'suits me better' is more natural. Suggestion: say 'a bungalow with a single floor' or 'a single-storey bungalow' and use 'suits me better' for natural phrasing.