建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence about current situation, then give concise past comparison and a brief specific detail. Use correct tense and remove hesitations. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Now there are a few tall buildings near my home. When I was a child there were none, but in the last five years two or three apartment blocks and an office tower have been built nearby.

建議: Answer directly, then give a clear reason and a specific example. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to connect ideas and avoid vague phrases like 'really special'.

範例: Not usually — I don't often photograph buildings because I'm not especially interested in architectural details. However, if I encounter an unusual or historic building, for example an old cathedral or a modern skyscraper with a striking design, I will take a photo.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence stating preference, then give specific reasons and an example of the type of building or city. Reduce fillers and repetition.

範例: I would like to visit historical buildings in Europe. For example, I want to see Gothic cathedrals in France and Baroque palaces in Italy because their architecture looks stunning in films and I want to study the details in person.

建議: State your preference clearly, then give two concise, specific reasons. Correct vocabulary (e.g. 'apartments' not 'patients') and avoid fragments. End with a brief concluding sentence.

範例: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building. I am afraid of heights and I worry about safety during earthquakes, so I would prefer a small house at ground level where I feel safer.

× There wasn't one when I was young, but before I leave home for a career to study abroad. Uh, I think there has been some changes in buildings and I think there is, it has been like two or three totally around me.

✓ There weren't any when I was young, but before I left home to study abroad for my career. I think there have been some changes in the buildings, and now there are two or three around me.

Multiple errors: (1) 'There wasn't one' is incorrect for countable plural 'buildings' so use 'There weren't any' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1: Singular and plural issue). (2) 'before I leave home' mixes tenses; the action is in the past so use past tense 'before I left home' (Grammar Problem Type ID 5: Past tense issue). (3) 'for a career to study abroad' is awkward order; 'to study abroad for my career' clarifies purpose (Grammar Problem Type ID 26: Sentence structure errors). (4) 'there has been some changes' is wrong because 'changes' is plural and should take 'have been' (Grammar Problem Type ID 27: Subject-verb agreement errors). (5) 'I think there is, it has been like two or three totally around me' is ungrammatical; correct to 'now there are two or three around me' using plural verb and clearer adverb placement (Grammar Problem Type ID 20: Incorrect adverb placement and ID 1: Singular and plural issue). Suggestions: match noun number with verbs, keep consistent past tense for past events, reorder phrases for clarity, and use 'there is/are' correctly for singular/plural.

× I don't enjoy watching the buildings, like appreciate the art of the buildings so I have never taken the picture of them.

✓ I don't enjoy looking at buildings or appreciating their architectural art, so I have never taken pictures of them.

'Watching the buildings' is not the usual collocation; use 'looking at' or 'admiring' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11). 'Appreciate the art of the buildings' should be 'appreciating their architectural art' to use the gerund after 'enjoy' and correct possessive (Grammar Problem Type ID 8: Verb + -ing form). 'Taken the picture of them' should be plural 'taken pictures of them' and use 'of' correctly after 'picture(s) of' (Grammar Problem Type ID 14: Incorrect use of quantifiers and ID 11). Suggestions: use natural collocations like 'look at' or 'admire', follow verbs like 'enjoy' with gerunds, and use plural 'pictures' when talking generally.

× But if I see something really special about the building I will take some photos.

✓ But if I see something really special about a building, I will take some photos.

The original mixes a specific definite noun 'the building' with a general conditional. Use 'a building' for any building you might see (Grammar Problem Type ID 19: Incorrect comparison object also relates, but primary is present tense/context). The structure 'if I see... I will take' is correct for first conditional; add a comma and use 'a building' for general reference. Suggestion: match article choice to the intended generality and punctuate the conditional clause.

× Yes, uh, this, it is not a specific building, but I would like to see and observe some buildings in Europe because in movies I have some, I have seen them and I feel like they are really architecturally interesting, so I would like to see them one day.

✓ It's not a specific building, but I would like to see and observe some buildings in Europe because I have seen them in movies and they look architecturally interesting, so I would like to visit them one day.

Run-on and awkward phrasing: remove filler 'this, it' and use 'It's not a specific building' (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). 'I have some, I have seen them' is redundant; combine to 'I have seen them in movies' and keep present perfect for past experiences relevant now (Grammar Problem Type ID 6: Present tense issue). 'I would like to see them one day' changed to 'visit them' to match context. Suggestions: remove redundancies, use concise clauses, and keep tense consistent.

× No that wouldn't be my dream because I have a fear of height and also the natural disaster like earthquakes so I feel like tall patients would not be a safe place for me to live.

✓ No, that wouldn't be my dream because I have a fear of heights and also of natural disasters like earthquakes, so I feel like tall apartments would not be a safe place for me to live.

Multiple issues: 'fear of height' should be 'fear of heights' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs and ID 14 quantifier style), and 'the natural disaster like earthquakes' should be 'natural disasters like earthquakes' using plural and correct preposition 'of' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11). 'tall patients' is a pronunciation/spelling error; correct to 'tall apartments' (Grammar Problem Type ID 12: Incorrect use of pronouns/words—here word choice). Third person singular issue flagged because original uses 'wouldn't be' correctly, but other subject-verb agreement errors exist; main corrections address noun forms and word choice. Suggestions: use correct noun forms 'heights', pluralize 'disasters', and proofread for similar-sounding word errors.

× I'm I would feel safe in small house and shop out.

✓ I would feel safer in a small house or a low-rise building.

Original is ungrammatical: 'I'm I would' is incorrect duplication and 'small house and shop out' is unclear (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Use comparative 'safer' to express preference and provide a clear alternative like 'a small house or a low-rise building'. Also add articles 'a' before singular countable nouns (Grammar Problem Type ID 22: Article errors). Suggestions: avoid duplicating subjects/auxiliaries, use comparative adjectives when comparing safety, and include appropriate articles.