建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Nên trả lời trực tiếp, mạch lạc và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp; tránh lặp từ và nói lúng túng. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng trả lời câu hỏi (ví dụ: “Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home.”). (2) Dùng thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: loại tòa nhà, khoảng cách, thời điểm nhìn thấy). (3) Dùng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý và tránh tiếng “uh” hoặc lặp từ. (4) Chú ý thì và số ít/ số nhiều (e.g., “apartment buildings” không phải “tour apartments”).

範例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. I can see several modern apartment buildings and a few skyscrapers from my balcony. In the evening they are beautifully lit, which makes the skyline look very attractive.

建議: Cần dùng câu gọn, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và tránh lặp từ. Cụ thể: (1) Trả lời trực tiếp: “Yes, I do.” (2) Giải thích ngắn gọn với lý do và ví dụ cụ thể (e.g., khi đi du lịch hoặc lúc ban đêm). (3) Chú ý động từ và danh từ số ít/ nhiều (“take vibrant photos” không phải “take to take a vibrant photos”).

範例: Yes, I do. Whenever I see an impressive skyscraper, I like to take photos of it, especially at night when the lights make the building look vibrant. I often take pictures with my family during our outings.

建議: Cần trả lời rõ ràng, nêu ví dụ chính xác và dùng cấu trúc liệt kê đúng ngữ pháp. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề nêu tòa nhà cụ thể bạn muốn thăm. (2) Sử dụng tên đúng (e.g., “the Eiffel Tower in Paris” not “Paris Eiffel Tower”) và tránh lỗi nối từ (“are” sai). (3) Thêm lý do ngắn gọn và một chi tiết cá nhân (ví dụ: chụp ảnh cùng gia đình, trải nghiệm trên đỉnh tháp).

範例: Yes, I would love to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris and the Tower of London. They are both iconic and very beautiful. I especially want to take photos of the architecture and enjoy the view with my family.

建議: Cần hoàn thành câu, dùng từ ngữ tự nhiên và bổ sung lý do cụ thể. Cụ thể: (1) Trả lời trực tiếp: “Yes, I would.” (2) Hoàn thiện lý do: nêu lợi ích (view, tiện ích, an ninh) và ảnh hưởng tiêu cực nếu cần. (3) Tránh tính từ chung chung như “fantastic” một mình; đưa thêm ví dụ cụ thể (e.g., large windows, nearby facilities).

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall apartment building. The view from high floors would be amazing, and such buildings often have good facilities like gyms and security, which would make daily life more convenient.

× There are various tour apartments and magnificent skyscrapers.

✓ There are various tourist apartments and magnificent skyscrapers.

The adjective 'tour' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'tourist' to describe apartments related to tourism. Use 'tourist apartments' instead of 'tour apartments'. Suggestion: Use a dictionary to check adjective forms or recall common collocations like 'tourist attractions', 'tourist apartment'.

× Uh, I can see them when I go to the balcony and in the evening their buildings lit up and it's very beautiful.

✓ I can see them when I go out onto the balcony, and in the evening the buildings are lit up and it's very beautiful.

The pronoun 'their' is incorrect because there is no antecedent; use the definite article 'the' to refer to the buildings previously mentioned. Also add 'are' for passive 'lit up'. Suggestion: Use 'the' to refer back to known items and ensure auxiliary verbs are present in passive constructions.

× Yes, when I see magnificent and beautiful skyscrapers, I just want to take to take a vibrant photos of this building with my family.

✓ Yes, when I see magnificent and beautiful skyscrapers, I just want to take vibrant photos of these buildings with my family.

Errors: duplicate phrase 'to take to take'; incorrect article/number 'a vibrant photos' (mixes singular article with plural noun). Use plural 'photos' without 'a' and remove duplicate. Also 'this building' should match plural 'skyscrapers' so use 'these buildings'. Suggestion: Check for accidental repetition, match articles to noun number, and maintain consistent singular/plural references.

× To be honest, there are many buildings that I want to visit like the London Tower are the Paris Eiffel Tower.

✓ To be honest, there are many buildings that I want to visit, like the London Tower and the Paris Eiffel Tower.

The conjunction 'are' is incorrectly used between coordinate nouns. Use 'and' to connect the two building names. Also add a comma for clarity. Suggestion: Use coordinating conjunctions (and, or) to join items in a list; ensure verbs agree with the subject and are not inserted between nouns.

× They are so beautiful and vibrant.

✓ They are so beautiful and vibrant.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Keep descriptive adjectives consistent. Suggestion: No action required.

× I want to take a photo of these architecture with my family.

✓ I want to take a photo of this architecture with my family.

'Architecture' is an uncountable noun and typically takes 'this' rather than 'these'. If referring to several buildings, use 'these buildings' instead of 'these architecture'. Suggestion: Decide whether to use the uncountable 'architecture' (singular demonstrative) or change to 'these buildings' for plural.

× Yes, living in a tall building like high apartment or skyscraper is very fantastic because of its vibrant view and.

✓ Yes, living in a tall building like a high apartment or a skyscraper is very fantastic because of its vibrant view.

Missing articles before 'high apartment' and 'skyscraper' ('a' needed). The sentence also ended with an extraneous 'and.' Use 'a high apartment or a skyscraper' and remove the trailing 'and'. Suggestion: Include articles for singular countable nouns and avoid sentence fragments or trailing conjunctions.