建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 答えは直接的で分かりやすいですが、文法と語順の誤り、冗長な表現が目立ちます。より自然にするために、冠詞や前置詞の使い方を直し、理由を短く整理してください。また一文が長くなりすぎないように2〜3文に分けると明確になります。具体的には “a condominium is near my house” や “I can't see the trains behind it” のように簡潔に表現しましょう。

範例: Yes. There is a tall condominium near my house. It is so high that I can’t see the trains behind it.

建議: 内容は伝わりますが、語句の繰り返しや不自然な表現（take picture / take photos of church / I've never seen yet）が見られます。語彙の重複を避け、時制や冠詞を正しく使い、理由や頻度を示す接続語を入れると自然になります。例：’I usually take photos of churches and unusual buildings when I travel.’ のように整理してください。

範例: Yes, I do. Since I’m in Canada now, I often take photos of churches and any unusual buildings I come across when I travel.

建議: 答えは明確ですが、文法の誤り（‘I like arts’, ‘see any stained glasses’, 重複の“I I”）と語順の問題があります。好みの理由をもう少し具体的にして、リンク語（because, so, therefore）を適切に使って論理を整えてください。また文は2〜3文に分けて簡潔に述べましょう。

範例: Yes. I would like to visit historic churches and museums because I enjoy art. In churches I especially like seeing stained-glass windows, so I often visit them at weekends.

建議: 意見ははっきりしていますが、文法や語彙が不正確で、論理のつながりも弱いです（‘we gonna be there actually’, ‘the glasses will broken’）。より自然で丁寧な言い回しにして、安全性に関する具体的な理由を付け加えると説得力が増します。例：’I prefer not to because of frequent earthquakes; I’m worried about structural damage and falling glass.’ のように表現してください。

範例: No, I wouldn’t. I’m from Japan, where earthquakes are common, so I’m concerned about structural damage and falling glass in tall buildings.

× Yes, one condominium is near by my house and it's so tall so I can't see the trains behind the condominium.

✓ Yes, one condominium is nearby my house, and it's so tall that I can't see the trains behind the condominium.

The preposition 'near by' is incorrect; use the adverb 'nearby'. Add 'that' after 'so tall' to introduce the result clause. Use a comma before the conjunction 'and' when joining independent clauses. Suggestions: replace 'near by' with 'nearby', insert 'that' after 'so tall', and add a comma before 'and'.

× Yes I do, I'm in Canada now so I usually take picture and take photos of church or sometimes I see rare buildings that I've never seen yet so I usually take photos of buildings.

✓ Yes I do. I'm in Canada now, so I usually take pictures and photos of churches, or sometimes I see unusual buildings that I've never seen before, so I usually take photos of buildings.

'Take picture' should be plural 'take pictures'. 'Church' should be plural 'churches' when speaking generally. 'Rare' is better replaced with 'unusual' and 'yet' in this context is unidiomatic; use 'before'. Use commas to separate clauses. Suggestions: pluralize countable nouns and use 'before' instead of 'yet'.

× Yes I do it's churches or museums because I like arts and if I go to churches I can see any stained glasses. That's why I I love it so and I usually go there on weekends.

✓ Yes, I do. They are churches or museums because I like art, and if I go to churches I can see stained glass windows. That's why I love them, and I usually go there on weekends.

Use 'they' to refer to plural 'churches or museums'. 'Arts' should be 'art' when speaking about the subject in general. 'Any stained glasses' is incorrect; use 'stained glass windows'. 'I I' is a typo. Match plural pronouns ('them') to plural nouns. Suggestions: fix pronoun agreement, use 'art' not 'arts', and correct the phrase to 'stained glass windows'.

× No I don't because I'm from Japan. We have so many earthquakes and if we live in tall buildings we gonna be there actually. Like the glasses will broken or the tall buildings.

✓ No, I don't because I'm from Japan. We have many earthquakes, and if we lived in tall buildings, things could happen. For example, the windows could break or the tall buildings could be damaged.

'We gonna be there' is informal and ungrammatical; use modal verbs to express possibility ('could'). 'Will broken' is incorrect; use 'could be broken' or 'could break'. Use conditional 'if we lived' for hypothetical situations. Also 'glasses' is ambiguous; 'windows' is clearer. Suggestions: use conditional and modal verbs correctly ('could', 'might'), and use passive constructions properly ('could be broken').